Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct, use correct past-tense grammar, and organize details with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add 1–2 specific details using connectors such as “because” or “for example.” Avoid redundancy and incorrect word forms (e.g., ‘was’ → ‘were’; ‘sliding’ → ‘slides’).

Exemplo: Yes. I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child because they had many play facilities. For example, there were swings, slides and a set of monkey bars where my friends and I would climb and race.

Sugestão: Use present simple for current habits and correct grammar. Give a concise topic sentence about current liking, then explain frequency and reason with linking words (e.g., ‘but’, ‘because’, ‘when’). Fix pronouns and verb forms and avoid extra words. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks, but not very often because I am busy studying for the IELTS. I usually go when I visit my younger cousin because he enjoys the playground and I like spending time with him.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct condition structures and definite articles. If you mean you would like more parks, say so and explain briefly. Use connectors like ‘however’ or ‘if’ correctly and avoid confusing negatives.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because currently there is only one. If the government prioritizes park projects in the future, I hope they will build several new parks with playgrounds and green spaces.

Sugestão: Provide a clear statement about wanting to visit parks and give specific reasons. Use correct tense and complete sentences. Mention a particular park or type (e.g., large city park) and list 2–3 amenities with proper nouns removed. Avoid incomplete phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks in other cities because they usually offer more facilities. For example, big city parks often have modern playgrounds, long cycling paths and places to rent bicycles or small electric buses for tours.

× Yes, I like going to the park when I was a child because they have many amenities playing there like bicycle and also sliding and they have a jungle monkey bars that called jungle.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child because it had many play amenities like bicycles, slides, and monkey bars, which we called the jungle.

Tense inconsistency and subject reference: the speaker refers to childhood (past) so present tense 'like' should be past 'liked' and 'have' should be past 'had'. Also plural/singular and article errors: 'the park' is singular so use 'it' instead of 'they'; 'amenities playing there' is incorrect word order—use 'play amenities' or 'playground amenities'. 'Bicycle' and 'sliding' are wrong forms—use plural 'bicycles' and noun 'slides'. 'a jungle monkey bars that called jungle' mixes articles and clauses; correct to 'monkey bars, which we called the jungle'. Suggestions: keep past tense for childhood, match singular/plural pronouns, use correct noun forms and clear clause connectors.

× Yeah. Not all the times because I am busy for my review in IELTS, but I often go to the park when I visit my with my younger cousin because they still a child and I enjoy with them to spend there.

✓ Yeah. Not always, because I am busy studying for my IELTS review, but I often go to the park when I visit with my younger cousin because he/she is still a child and I enjoy spending time with them there.

Tense and word choice: 'Not all the times' should be 'Not always'. 'I am busy for my review in IELTS' is awkward—use 'busy studying for my IELTS review'. Redundant 'visit my with my younger cousin' should be 'visit with my younger cousin'. Pronoun agreement and number: 'they still a child' is incorrect—use 'he/she is still a child' or 'they are still a child' if using singular they consistently. 'I enjoy with them to spend there' has wrong verb order; use 'I enjoy spending time with them there'. Suggestions: maintain present continuous for ongoing action (am busy studying), fix pronoun agreement and use correct verb + -ing forms for 'enjoy spending'.

× No, we have only one park and we are not many have more parks in the city. But in our future if the government priority the project of park, I would like to see a lot of park in our city.

✓ No, we have only one park and there are not many other parks in the city. But in the future, if the government prioritizes park projects, I would like to see many parks in our city.

Plural and article use: 'we are not many have more parks' is ungrammatical—use 'there are not many other parks'. 'In our future' should be 'in the future'. Verb and subject-verb agreement: 'if the government priority the project' is wrong—use 'if the government prioritizes park projects' (verb 'prioritize' needs third person singular 'prioritizes'). 'a lot of park' should be plural 'many parks'. Suggestions: use 'there are' for existence, pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple items, and use correct third-person verb forms.

× Yes, because in other cities they build another park so and other of that is they have a lot of amenities like playgrounds, slides and also riding a bus, bicycle and.

✓ Yes, because in other cities they have built additional parks, and these parks have many amenities like playgrounds, slides, and facilities for riding bikes or taking buses.

Tense and verb form: 'they build another park' should be past or present perfect to describe completed actions in other cities—'they have built additional parks'. Word order and redundancy: 'so and other of that is' is incorrect; use 'and these parks'. List and noun forms: 'riding a bus, bicycle and.' is incomplete and mixes activities—clarify as 'facilities for riding bikes or taking buses' or 'bike paths and bus access'. Suggestions: use present perfect to indicate existence from past to present, simplify connectors, and make lists parallel and complete.