Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (thời past: like → liked), tránh lặp từ và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn. Bổ sung 1 câu chủ đề + 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên, kỷ niệm). Dùng từ nối để mạch lạc (because, so, and).

Exemplo: I liked going to parks as a child because my parents often took me there on weekends. I remember feeding ducks by the pond and playing on the swings with my brothers, which made those days fun and memorable.

Sugestão: Giảm tiếng ấp úng, sửa ngữ pháp (it’s → it is fine but phrasing awkward; 'go to the park make me' → 'going to the park makes me'), tránh lỗi đại từ (their → my). Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động giúp giảm stress. Sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a stressful day. I often take a walk or sit under a tree to read, and meeting friends for a short picnic also lifts my mood.

Sugestão: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (don’t → doesn't), cấu trúc câu rườm rà và thiếu rõ ràng. Tránh dịch sát nghĩa từng cụm từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes, I would), rồi nêu 2 lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: sức khỏe, không gian cho gia đình), dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide healthy outdoor spaces for families. For example, parks let people exercise, enjoy nature like watching birds, and breathe fresh air which reduces stress.

Sugestão: Cần chính xác tên và mô tả (unclear phrase 'bigger white fly environment'), sửa ngữ pháp số nhiều/đồng nhất (trees and animals), và viết ngắn gọn: 1 câu chủ đề + 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động bạn muốn làm (ví dụ: đi bộ đường dài, chụp ảnh động vật).

Exemplo: I would like to visit Cookfour National Park because I want to enjoy its peaceful scenery and diverse wildlife. I plan to go hiking on the trails and take photographs of trees and animals while relaxing away from the city.

× When I was a child, I like going to the parks because my parents usually take me to the park to play together.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to parks because my parents usually took me to the park to play together.

The sentence refers to past habitual actions, so verbs should be in the past tense (liked, took). Also use 'parks' or 'the park' consistently; 'going to parks' sounds natural without 'the' when speaking generally. Suggestion: maintain past tense for all verbs describing childhood activities.

× I can feel the fresh air, I can play with my family and enjoy the our free times together.

✓ I could feel the fresh air, I could play with my family and enjoy our free time together.

Use past modality consistent with previous sentence: 'could' for ability in the past. Remove extra article 'the' before 'our'. 'Free time' is an uncountable noun, so use singular 'time' rather than 'times'. Also use commas or separate sentences to avoid run-on sentences.

× Yes, actually it's my hobby.

✓ Yes, actually it's my hobby.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present tense appropriately to express a current habit or preference. No change needed.

× I still like going to parks now because I'm uh, today I have a lot of uh, stress and go to the park make me more relaxed.

✓ I still like going to parks now because today I have a lot of stress and going to the park makes me more relaxed.

Mixing present simple and incorrect verb forms: 'go to the park make' is wrong. Use 'going' (gerund) as subject and 'makes' (third-person singular) to agree with singular subject 'going to the park'. Remove filler 'uh' in formal answers. Maintain present tense for current feelings.

× I can express their emotions, play with my friend and family to reduce stress.

✓ I can express my emotions and play with my friends and family to reduce stress.

Pronoun 'their' incorrectly refers to the speaker; use 'my'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring generally; use 'and' to join activities. Maintain parallel structure: 'express my emotions and play...'.

× Frankly speaking, my city don't have many parks so I really like to see more parks in my city because I think parks have everyone enjoy time with their loved only by see the birds or go for work can have them feed fresh air more relax.

✓ Frankly speaking, my city doesn't have many parks, so I would really like to see more parks because I think parks allow everyone to enjoy time with their loved ones, simply by seeing the birds or going for a walk to breathe fresh air and relax more.

Multiple errors: 'don't' should be 'doesn't' for singular 'city' (subject-verb agreement). Sentence is run-on and ungrammatical; restructure for clarity. 'Have everyone enjoy time' is awkward; use 'allow everyone to enjoy time'. 'Their loved' needs 'loved ones'. 'See the birds or go for work' -> 'seeing the birds or going for a walk'. 'Feed fresh air' incorrect; use 'breathe fresh air'. Use 'relax' or 'relax more'. Suggestions: break into clauses, use proper verbs and idiomatic expressions.

× In the future I would like to visit Cookfour National Park because I want to enjoy the peaceful scenery and see the bigger white fly environment.

✓ In the future, I would like to visit Cookfour National Park because I want to enjoy the peaceful scenery and see the larger white fly habitat.

Use of 'bigger' with abstract 'environment' is awkward; 'larger' is better. 'White fly environment' is unclear; 'white fly habitat' or a more specific phrase is more appropriate. Maintain future intention with 'would like' and 'want'.

× I also hope to take photographs of these trees and animal and relax in a quieter national environment.

✓ I also hope to take photographs of the trees and animals and relax in a quieter natural environment.

Use plural 'animals' to match 'trees'. 'National environment' is incorrect word choice; likely 'natural environment' is intended. Use definite article 'the' if referring to specific trees and animals in that park. Maintain parallel structure: 'take photographs of... and relax...'.