Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid filler words (um, uh) and correct grammar ("when I was a child").

Exemplo: I didn't enjoy going to parks when I was a child. However, I sometimes went with my family because they wanted to spend time together.

Sugestão: Give a concise direct answer, use correct collocations and grammar (e.g., "when I'm bored", "it makes my mind feel refreshed"), and limit to 2–3 sentences with a linking word to connect reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and calm. As a result, visiting a park helps me relax and refresh my mind.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "It depends on people's choices" is awkward here). Say your preference and give a specific reason. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there are currently very few. More parks would give residents better places to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Be specific and use correct conditional tense and names. Remove fillers and make one clear plan sentence plus a reason or detail (where it is, what you want to see).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Bardiya National Park in western Nepal. If I have the chance, I will go to see the wildlife and enjoy the natural scenery.

× 'I did not like going to parks when I was child, but sometimes, umm, I will go with my family.'

✓ 'I did not like going to parks when I was a child, but sometimes I would go with my family.'

'a child' needs the indefinite article for singular count noun. Also use 'would' (past habit) instead of 'will' to match past time 'did not like'. Remove filler comma and extra words for clarity.'

× 'Yes of course I like going to parks when when I'm boring because their environment is peaceful and calm.'

✓ 'Yes, of course I like going to parks when I am bored because their environment is peaceful and calm.'

'I'm boring' describes the person as boring to others; correct adjective for feeling is 'bored'. Remove duplicate 'when'. Add comma after 'Yes'. Tense (present) remains but adjective change fixes meaning.'

× 'It's makes my mind refresh.'

✓ 'It makes my mind feel refreshed.'

'It's makes' is incorrect because 'it makes' is correct; contraction 'it's' (it is) plus 'makes' is redundant. 'Refresh' is wrong form; use adjective 'refreshed' or phrase 'feel refreshed'. Also use 'my mind' with 'feel'.'

× 'The hard question for me it depends on People's Choice but but my sources is build awesome parks in my city because in my city there are there are few parks.'

✓ 'That is a hard question for me; it depends on people's choices, but my preference is to build more good parks in my city because there are few parks.'

Original has multiple structural problems: missing demonstrative 'That', awkward clause ordering, incorrect capitalization 'People's Choice', repeated words, wrong noun/verb agreement 'my sources is build', and repetition 'there are there are'. Rephrased to correct sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and clearer meaning. 'People's choices' plural fits context; 'my preference' clarifies intention.'

× 'Yes, of course. Uh, I heard about our National Park in a western part of Nepal, Bodhi National Park, uh, if I had a chance, uh, I will go definitely in the future.'

✓ 'Yes, of course. I have heard about Bordi National Park in the western part of Nepal; if I have the chance, I will definitely go in the future.'

'Heard' alone is acceptable but present perfect 'have heard' fits relevance to now. Use conditional correctly: 'if I have the chance' (real future possibility) not 'if I had'. Place adverb 'definitely' before 'go' for natural order. Correct park name spelling (Bordi) if intended; keep 'the western part' with article. Remove filler words for fluency.'