Parks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, correct grammar (e.g., "homework" not "homeworks"), and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add one specific brief example to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: Not really. As a child I preferred indoor activities because I loved reading adventure books and doing science experiments at home. For example, I spent many afternoons building model rockets instead of playing outside.

Sugestão: Good direct response and reason, but streamline language and use linking words for coherence. Replace vague phrases like "improve my health conditions" with specific benefits, and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Since I sit at a desk all day, I now go to parks to walk or jog for exercise, which helps me stay fit and reduce stress.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid disfluent starts. Use one clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons or comparisons. Correct grammar and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I live in a very urban area with few green spaces, so I miss the many parks I had in my rural hometown; more parks would offer places for exercise and family outings.

Sugestão: Be specific and fluent. Start with a clear statement naming the park, correct vocabulary ("park" not "perks"), and give concrete reasons and a brief future context. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I would love to visit Ueno Park in Tokyo because it is very large, has museums and ponds, and would be a great place to take my future children for picnics and walks.

× In my childhood, I did not like going to the parks because I preferred indoor activities.

✓ In my childhood, I did not like going to parks because I preferred indoor activities.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'parks' is unnecessary when speaking about parks in general. Use the zero article for plural countable nouns when referring generally. Suggestion: remove 'the' to say 'going to parks'.

× I used to study a lot and spent most of my time, uh, doing my homeworks or reading the books.

✓ I used to study a lot and spent most of my time doing my homework or reading books.

'Homeworks' is incorrect because 'homework' is an uncountable noun and does not take a plural form; use 'homework'. 'The books' implies specific books already mentioned; when speaking generally use 'books' without the article. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× So I was I more leaned towards indoor activities to be honest.

✓ So I leaned more towards indoor activities, to be honest.

The original has redundancy and incorrect word order: 'I was I more leaned' is ungrammatical. Use simple past 'leaned' with correct word order and place 'more' before 'towards'. Add a comma before the incidental phrase 'to be honest'.

× I prefer to go to parks now because going to parks is good to exercise for me.

✓ I prefer going to parks now because going to parks is good exercise for me.

After 'prefer' use either 'to' + infinitive or the gerund consistently; 'prefer going to parks now' is natural. 'Good to exercise for me' is awkward: use the noun 'exercise' or a phrase like 'good for exercising'. Here 'good exercise for me' is concise and correct.

× I spend most of my working hours sitting so I need some exercises to stay healthy and that is one of the ways to improve my health conditions.

✓ I spend most of my working hours sitting, so I need some exercise to stay healthy, and that is one of the ways to improve my health.

Use 'exercise' as an uncountable noun rather than 'exercises' when speaking generally. 'Health conditions' is redundant; use 'health'. Add commas to separate clauses for clarity. Ensure present simple tense consistency.

× Or parks in my city and in my neighborhood.

✓ I mean parks in my city and in my neighborhood.

The sentence fragment 'Or parks...' is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. Replace with a complete clause 'I mean parks...' to clarify the speaker's intention.

× I am living in an urbanized area.

✓ I live in an urbanized area.

Use simple present 'I live' for a permanent situation rather than present continuous 'I am living', which implies a temporary action. Simple present is more appropriate here.

× The number of parks is quite limited and I was living actually living in the rural areas in my childhood.

✓ The number of parks is quite limited, and I actually lived in rural areas in my childhood.

Remove duplicate 'living' and use simple past 'lived' for a past habitual/state. Use 'rural areas' without 'the' unless referring to specific rural areas. Place 'actually' before the verb for natural word order.

× I missed the good old days with lot of parks.

✓ I missed the good old days with a lot of parks.

'Lot of' requires an article: use 'a lot of parks' to indicate many parks. Also 'the good old days' is correct; keep it as is.

× Yes, I have one perks that I definitely would like to go one of.

✓ Yes, I have one park that I would definitely like to visit.

'One perks' is incorrect: 'park' is the intended noun. The clause 'would like to go one of' is ungrammatical. Use 'would like to visit' and a clear noun: 'one park'.

× The park in the center of Tokyo is well known for its large area and lots of amenities inside.

✓ The park in the center of Tokyo is well known for its large area and many amenities.

'Lots of amenities inside' is informal and 'inside' is unnecessary. Use 'many amenities' for a more natural phrasing. 'The park in the center of Tokyo' is acceptable; keep the definite article because a specific park is meant.

× And if I have a child I can bring my children to.

✓ And if I have a child, I can bring them there.

The original mixes singular 'a child' with plural 'my children' and ends with a dangling preposition. Use consistent singular/plural and a clear object: 'bring them there' or 'bring my child there'. Add a comma after the conditional clause. 'Them' is a gender-neutral singular pronoun if you keep 'a child'.