Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., 'taking pictures', 'for others'→'of others' or omit, 'capture' instead of 'catch up'). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing my daughter to capture special moments, and I often take photos of landscapes and interesting scenes I encounter while traveling.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Fix grammar (e.g., 'rural areas', 'spend time alone', 'I value quiet surroundings'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetitive phrases.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because I value peace and quiet. For example, as a graphic designer I need a calm atmosphere to focus on creative work, so I enjoy living near nature rather than in a busy city.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give a clear comparison with specific details and correct grammar ('views', 'from other countries', 'China'). Use linking words for comparisons (e.g., 'however', 'for example'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

Exemplo: I prefer views from other countries because they often feel more varied and interesting. For example, I visited New Zealand and Japan recently; I found New Zealand's landscapes more impressive than Japan's, and Japan's scenery more diverse than what I usually see in China.

× Yes, I like taking picture for others especially I want to catch up the good times of my daughter and the beautiful things I ever see in my life.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of others, especially because I want to capture the good times of my daughter and the beautiful things I have seen in my life.

Plural form 'picture' should be 'pictures' when referring generally; preposition 'of' is correct for 'taking pictures of others'; 'catch up' is incorrect collocation for photographing — use 'capture'; tense 'ever see' is incorrect; use present perfect 'have seen' to refer to experiences up to now. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general activities, choose correct verbs ('capture') and use present perfect for life experiences.

× Absolutely, I prefer to live in rural area because I'm a quiet person.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer to live in a rural area because I'm a quiet person.

Missing article before 'rural area' — use 'a rural area' for a singular countable noun. Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('a' or 'the') before countable singular nouns.

× I enjoy spending time with myself all along and ideally treasure my around time and I do.

✓ I enjoy spending time by myself and I treasure my personal time.

'Spending time with myself' is unnatural; 'by myself' is the correct phrase. 'All along' and 'ideally' are unnecessary and cause awkward structure; 'my around time' is incorrect phrase. Suggestion: simplify to natural collocations: 'spend time by myself' and 'treasure my personal time.'

× As a graphic designer, I hold my work atmosphere is quiet.

✓ As a graphic designer, I prefer my work environment to be quiet.

The original sentence uses 'hold' incorrectly and 'work atmosphere is quiet' is awkward. Use 'prefer ... to be' to express preference and 'work environment' is a more natural collocation than 'work atmosphere.' Also needs infinitive structure 'to be quiet.' Suggestion: use 'prefer' with 'to be' and choose natural collocations.

× Uh, to be honest, I prefer the vis from other countries because right now I went to New Zealand and and Japan and I enjoy New Zealand's view more than Japan and Japan view more than Chinese.

✓ Uh, to be honest, I prefer the views from other countries because recently I went to New Zealand and Japan, and I enjoyed New Zealand's views more than Japan's, and Japan's more than China's.

Multiple issues: 'vis' is misspelling of 'views'; 'from other countries' needs plural 'views'; 'right now' is inappropriate for a past trip — use 'recently' or simple past; 'I went to New Zealand and and Japan' has duplicated 'and' and needs parallel phrasing; comparisons need possessive forms: 'New Zealand's views' and 'Japan's' and 'China's.' Also use past tense 'enjoyed' for completed trips. Suggestion: correct spelling, use appropriate time adverb, ensure consistency in tense, and use possessive forms when comparing countries' views.