Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct repetition and grammar, and use clear vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I enjoy taking photos), then give one or two specific details using linking words. Fix repetition and choose precise words (e.g. 'scenery' and 'natural landscapes').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. In particular, I prefer natural landscapes because I like capturing mountains, rivers and forests; they look more peaceful than modern city scenes.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Improve grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid filler phrases. Use precise vocabulary: 'fresh air', 'natural scenery', 'crowded'.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because the fresh air and open spaces make me feel relaxed. Also, there is abundant natural scenery such as fields and forests, whereas urban areas are often crowded and dominated by buildings.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid vague repetition. Start with a clear statement (I like both), then explain briefly why with a specific example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however', and correct grammar (avoid 'nearly', finish sentences).

Exemplo: I like views in both my country and abroad because I mainly enjoy natural scenery. For example, I appreciate local mountains near my hometown, but I also enjoy tropical beaches when I travel abroad.

× I capture several views, but my favorite one, my favorite one is taking about taking picture about scenery and a fuse and natural, natural fuse more than modern, modern.

✓ I capture several views, but my favorite is taking pictures of natural scenery and features rather than modern ones.

Singular/plural errors: 'favorite one is taking about taking picture' mixes singular/plural and extra words. Use plural 'pictures' after 'taking' and plural 'features' or 'ones' to match 'modern'. Remove duplicate words and 'about' used incorrectly. Suggestion: simplify structure: 'my favorite is taking pictures of natural scenery and features rather than modern ones.' Use parallel structure and correct noun forms to match singular/plural.

× I prefer views in rural area since it can make me breathe like breathe in the fresh air and in urban areas they're very busy and there are many buildings and I don't like it.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas since they let me breathe in fresh air; urban areas are very busy with many buildings, which I don't like.

Singular/plural issue: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general preference. Pronoun reference: 'it can make me breathe' is incorrect; use 'they let me breathe' or 'they allow me to breathe'. Also streamline clauses and use correct plural nouns 'areas'. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally and ensure pronoun agrees with the noun.

× And also in rural area there are many scenery about natural.

✓ Also in rural areas there is much natural scenery.

Singular/plural: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' for a general statement. 'many scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun; use 'much natural scenery' or 'many natural scenes'. 'about natural' is wrong preposition use and word order; place 'natural' before 'scenery'. Suggestion: use 'much' with uncountable nouns and correct word order.

× Actually I like both of them because I don't think that I prefer my country or other countries and my preference also is about the natural views and nearly so if they are on my my country or outside it's very.

✓ Actually I like both because I don't prefer my country over other countries; my preference is for natural views, whether they are in my country or abroad.

Present tense and sentence structure errors: awkward phrasing 'I don't think that I prefer my country or other countries' and 'nearly so if they are on my my country or outside it's very.' Use simple present 'I don't prefer my country over other countries' to express general preference. Replace 'outside' with 'abroad' and fix repetition 'my my'. Remove 'it's very' which is incomplete. Suggestion: use clear comparative phrasing and concise clauses in present tense.