Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, use linking and a specific example. Avoid long, run-on phrases. Also limit to about 2–3 sentences. For example, fix articles (‘mountain areas’) and add a brief reason why you take photos.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Whenever I visit mountain areas such as Manali or Jamkashmid, I love taking photos of the scenery because the views—like snow-capped peaks and pine forests—are very photogenic and remind me of the trip.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons linked logically. Correct grammar (plural/singular, word choice). Avoid vague phrases like ‘dwell areas’ and unclear points. Use linking words such as ‘because’ or ‘for example’ and mention specific urban sights.

Exemplo: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer a variety of sights. For example, I enjoy photographing historic temples, busy markets and distinctive architecture, which give more interesting photo opportunities than rural landscapes.

Sugestão: Start with a clear direct answer, then give precise reasons with linking words. Correct grammar and sentence flow; avoid repetition. Mention a specific country or scene to make the detail more vivid and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad lets me see landscapes I don’t have at home. For instance, I enjoy visiting snowy mountain regions with my parents—those crisp weather and white peaks create breathtaking scenes that I love to photograph.

× Whenever I visit new places especially mountains areas like Manali, Jamkashmid, I definitely love taking pictures of the beautiful view.

✓ Whenever I visit new places, especially mountain areas like Manali and Jamkashmid, I definitely love taking pictures of the beautiful views.

The student used 'mountains areas' instead of 'mountain areas' (incorrect adjective-noun formation) and omitted 'and' between place names. Also 'view' should be plural 'views' to match general habit. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use 'mountain areas' and add 'and' between listed locations; use plural 'views' when referring to scenery in general.

× I prefer view in urban areas because urban areas are very crowded and dwell areas and when I visit urban areas I see a lot of views there such as temples and beautiful parts.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because urban areas are very crowded residential places, and when I visit urban areas I see many sights there such as temples and beautiful parks.

The student used 'view' (singular) where 'views' (plural) is needed, and 'dwell areas' is incorrect; 'residential places' or 'residential areas' is correct. 'A lot of views' is informal; 'many sights' or 'many views' is better. 'Beautiful parts' is unclear; likely 'beautiful parks' or 'pleasant parts' fits. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general preferences and choose correct collocations like 'residential areas' and 'many sights'.

× I would prefer views in other countries because I love to travel different places especially with my parents because we have a lot of fun together and I often see their mountains cool weather and white snow which make more beautiful

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love to travel to different places, especially with my parents, because we have a lot of fun together, and I often see their mountains, cool weather, and white snow, which make them more beautiful.

Errors include missing preposition 'to' after 'travel', missing commas, missing articles or pronouns to link 'mountains, cool weather, and white snow' to 'them' (the views), and incorrect verb agreement 'which make more beautiful' should be 'which make them more beautiful.' Also 'I would prefer' is acceptable but 'I prefer' is simpler. Suggestion: add 'to' after 'travel', include commas for clarity, and refer back with 'them' when describing what makes the views beautiful; ensure subject-verb agreement.