Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve fluency and reduce hesitations. Give a clear topic sentence, then add two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and repeat words. Also correct word choice (e.g., 'waves' may be intended as 'views' or 'scenes').

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different natural scenes, especially sunsets because of their vibrant colors. For example, I often take photos of waterfalls and mountain ranges to capture textures and scale, and I also like close-up shots of plants to show detail.

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles). Start with a direct statement, then give specific reasons with linking words. Remove fillers and repetitive phrases.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because they offer more varied natural subjects. For instance, you can photograph birds, wildlife and diverse tree species, which gives me more opportunities to capture interesting compositions.

Sugestão: Clarify the meaning (use 'scenes' or 'landscapes' instead of 'waves' if appropriate). Avoid repetition ('so lovely') and hesitations. Mention one or two named places clearly and give a short reason why they are special.

Exemplo: I prefer photographing views in my own country because many local landscapes are unique. For example, I often visit Anuradhapura and Polonnaruwa to capture ancient architecture and forested surroundings, which provide interesting textures and historical context.

× I like taking pictures of different waves uh, for example, about, uh, the environment surrounding, especially the sunset.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, for example of the surrounding environment, especially at sunset.

The student used 'waves' likely meaning 'views' and mixed prepositions. 'Like + taking' is correct (verb + -ing), but sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect noun. Replace 'waves' with 'views' and use 'of' for the object ('pictures of views') and 'at sunset' is the correct prepositional phrase for time. Suggestion: keep 'like taking' but use clear nouns and correct prepositions.

× And also I like to capture uh, waterfalls, mountains as well as uh.

✓ I also like to capture waterfalls and mountains.

The original sentence is incomplete and redundant ('and also' plus 'as well as' and trailing 'uh'). This is a sentence structure issue. Simplify to a complete parallel list: 'capture waterfalls and mountains.' Remove filler words. Suggestion: use simple coordinated nouns connected by 'and'.

× MMM, well, I like to do photography in a rural areas because when we go for a go to a rural area, we can see different types of sceneries, for instance, uh, birds, then different types of animals, uh, trees are there.

✓ Well, I like doing photography in rural areas because when we go to a rural area, we can see different kinds of scenery, such as birds, animals, and trees.

Errors include incorrect article usage ('a rural areas' should be 'rural areas' or 'a rural area') and awkward phrasing 'do photography' (prefer 'doing photography' or 'take photographs'). 'Sceneries' is uncountable; use 'scenery' or 'kinds of scenery.' Also streamline examples using 'such as.' Suggestion: choose plural or singular consistently and use uncountable nouns correctly.

× Well, I'd like to capture waves in my own country because in my country there are so, uh, lovely PA places which are so lovely to capture.

✓ Well, I'd like to capture views in my own country because there are many lovely places worth photographing.

The student used 'waves' again instead of 'views' and repeated 'so lovely.' 'PA' is unclear. This is a present tense statement about preference; use 'I'd like to capture' (correct) but follow with a concise present-tense clause. Replace 'which are so lovely to capture' with 'worth photographing.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear vocabulary.

× For instance, like places like Andhraadhapura, uh, Puranarwal, uh, some of them.

✓ For instance, places such as Andhraadhapura and Puranarwal.

The phrase 'For instance, like places like' is redundant and the trailing 'some of them' makes the sentence incomplete. This is a sentence structure issue. Use 'for instance' or 'places such as' followed by a concise list connected by 'and.' Suggestion: remove filler words and redundancies.