Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word, and finish with a brief example. Reduce hesitations like “uh” and redundant phrases such as “at that moment” and “really.”

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views when I travel. For example, I photograph landscapes to preserve memories, because each scene is unique and I may never visit that place again.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Give a clear preference sentence, then explain with specific details using linking words (e.g., because, for example). Remove repeated words and fillers. Provide a short example of a favorite rural scene.

Exemplo: I prefer photographing rural areas because they offer wide panoramic views and natural features like lakes. For example, near a village lakeside I often capture calm water reflections and sweeping hills that make striking photos.

Sugestão: Make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Use one clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid repeated words and incomplete endings. Use linking words like “because” and “for instance.”

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it still has many unexplored places. For instance, our mountains and valleys offer dramatic scenery, so I often visit them to photograph valleys at sunrise.

× I really love to take pictures of different views whenever I travel because I think the scenery which I'm capturing at that moment will be really, uh, memories of my life.

✓ I really love taking pictures of different views whenever I travel because I think the scenery I'm capturing at that moment will become lasting memories of my life.

Use 'love taking' (verb + -ing) instead of 'love to take' for natural preference expression; remove 'which' when using a reduced relative clause ('the scenery I'm capturing'); replace 'will be really, uh, memories' with 'will become lasting memories' for clarity and natural collocation.

× I can preserve them.

✓ I can preserve those memories.

Add the noun 'memories' to clarify what 'them' refers to; the original sentence lacks clarity even though grammatical, improving sentence structure by specifying the object.

× It's quite difficult to get same scenario all the time or you might not visit that place again, so.

✓ It's quite difficult to get the same scene all the time, and you might not visit that place again.

Include the definite article 'the' with 'same scene' and replace 'scenario' with 'scene' for natural collocation; connect clauses with 'and' and remove trailing filler 'so' to form a complete sentence.

× I like to take pictures of rural rural areas rather than taking pictures in city area.

✓ I like to take pictures of rural areas rather than in urban areas.

Remove duplicated 'rural', use plural 'areas' consistently, and use 'urban' instead of 'city area' for idiomatic contrast; this fixes pluralization and word choice.

× I find it very difficult to see a scenery and beautiful pictures in a city area.

✓ I find it very difficult to find scenic and beautiful views in a city area.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and not used with 'a'; change to adjective 'scenic' or 'scenic views'. Also use 'find' consistently and 'views' instead of 'pictures' to match meaning.

× Instead in lakeside area near the village, uh, I always find panoramic view and there are lakes as well.

✓ Instead, near lakesides by the village I always find panoramic views, and there are lakes as well.

Add commas and plural forms: 'lakesides' or 'the lakeside', use 'panoramic views' plural, and reorder phrase for natural English: 'near lakesides by the village' or 'near the lakeside by the village'.

× Also, I have we have mountains and valleys as well, which are having really beautiful scenery, so I definitely.

✓ Also, we have mountains and valleys that have really beautiful scenery, so I definitely would like to visit them.

Remove redundant 'I have we have' and use 'that have' instead of 'which are having' (avoid continuous with stative 'have'); finish the sentence with 'would like to visit them' to complete the idea and correct pronoun reference.