Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more precise and natural: correct small grammar errors, avoid redundancy, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words for coherence and choose context-appropriate vocabulary (e.g., views, landscapes, scenes).

Exemplo: Yes, I love photographing different landscapes. For example, I often capture sunsets and scenes after the rain because the light and colors look very fresh, and I keep the best shots on my phone as memories.

Sugestão: Eliminate fillers and repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and add specific reasons with linking words. Replace vague phrases like "different kind of vibes" with concrete descriptions (peaceful, quiet, natural).

Exemplo: I prefer rural views to urban ones because rural areas have lots of greenery and cleaner air, so they feel more peaceful and relaxing. For instance, I enjoy walking by fields and listening to birds rather than loud city traffic.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitations and repetition; give a concise topic sentence and one specific supporting detail that explains why. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, for instance).

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has diverse scenery—majestic mountains, clear lakes, and lush valleys. For example, I love photographing Himalayan panoramas that I cannot find elsewhere.

× Actually I love taking picture of different builds.

✓ Actually I love taking pictures of different buildings.

Use plural nouns when referring to multiple items. 'Picture' should be 'pictures' and 'builds' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'buildings'. Use 'taking pictures of different buildings' for clarity.

× The sunset view, the morning view, the weather after the rain, the clouds, everything looks so clean.

✓ The sunset view, the morning view, the weather after the rain, and the clouds all look so clean.

Maintain parallel structure and subject-verb agreement. Use 'all look' because the subject is plural (multiple views). Add 'and' for a natural list and remove the comma before the verb. This fixes subject-verb agreement and improves fluency.

× I really want it to stay on my phone as memory.

✓ I really want to keep them on my phone as memories.

Use 'keep' to indicate retaining photos and plural pronouns/nouns for multiple pictures: 'them' and 'memories'. 'Stay on my phone' is less natural than 'keep on my phone.'

× I prefer the views of rural, rural areas instead of urban areas because the uh, because in our rural areas there are greenery, the environment is very clean and it gives different kind of peace and different kind of vibes.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas instead of urban areas because in our rural areas there is a lot of greenery, the environment is very clean, and it gives a different kind of peace and different kinds of vibes.

Remove redundant word 'rural'. Use 'views in rural areas' not 'the views of rural'. 'There are greenery' is incorrect: 'greenery' is uncountable so use 'there is a lot of greenery'. Use singular agreement with 'a different kind of peace' and plural 'different kinds of vibes' or 'different kinds of vibe(s)'. Also improve conjunctions and commas for clarity.

× Actually I am from Nepal and my country contains a lot of greenery, beautiful views, mountains, lakes and rivers.

✓ Actually I am from Nepal, and my country has a lot of greenery, beautiful views, mountains, lakes, and rivers.

Use 'has' rather than 'contains' for describing features of a country; 'contains' is awkward here. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity and include the Oxford comma for consistency.

× So I I will I will prefer my own country instead of other countries.

✓ So I will prefer my own country over other countries.

Remove repeated words and use 'prefer A over B' or 'prefer A to B'. The future 'will prefer' is acceptable, but for habitual preference 'I prefer my own country to other countries' is more natural; here keep 'I will prefer' if future intent is intended, otherwise use present simple.