Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Speak more clearly and directly: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and limit answer to 3–4 concise sentences. Use linking words (for example, “because,” “so,” “also”) to connect ideas and give a specific reason or example (mention a particular scene in Cape Town). Pronunciation and fluency need smoothing—slow down slightly and choose simple accurate words rather than repeating.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I visited Cape Town I loved photographing the coastline and Table Mountain because the light and colors were spectacular. Also, looking at those photos on my phone makes me feel happy and alive, so I often take pictures to remember special places.

Sugestão: Clarify vocabulary and give a direct comparison: say whether you prefer urban or rural views, then explain with 1–2 supporting reasons using linking words like “because” or “because of.” Avoid vague phrases and filler sounds. Use precise words (e.g., “urban” not “Arabian areas” unless you mean a specific region) and one brief example.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because city centers are lively and full of interesting buildings. For instance, I enjoy taking photos of busy streets and tall architecture because they show the energy and culture of a place.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first and then support it with specific reasons and one example. Avoid unclear phrases like “crazy heart” and grammar errors—say “I prefer” or “I like” and explain why. Use linking words (“however,” “for example,” “also”) to contrast your feelings about domestic and foreign views.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer landscapes and cultures I haven’t seen before. For example, while my hometown has beautiful parks, I was fascinated by the dramatic scenery and different architecture I saw when I travelled abroad.

× In order to see I'm into it badly since I have been in Cape Town, I found it remarkably great and keep that that that feeling for a while.

✓ I have been really into taking photos since I was in Cape Town; I found it remarkable and kept that feeling for a while.

The original sentence has unclear structure, incorrect word choice and tense inconsistencies. 'In order to see' is unnecessary and incorrect here, 'I'm into it badly' is unnatural and should be 'really into'. 'Since I have been in Cape Town' mixes present perfect with a past event; 'since I was in Cape Town' or 'ever since I went to Cape Town' is clearer. 'keep that that that feeling' has repetition and wrong tense—use 'kept that feeling' to match past reference. Suggest simplifying and sequencing ideas: state when interest began, describe feelings, and keep consistent tense.

× When I browse my phone sometimes when I see it makes me feel really alive.

✓ When I browse my phone and see the photos, they make me feel really alive.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect clause connection. Use the gerund/participle structure correctly: 'When I browse my phone and see the photos' connects actions. 'When I see it' is vague; specify 'the photos' and use correct subject-verb agreement: 'they make me feel' rather than 'it makes me feel'. Also remove the repeated 'when' for clarity.

× So yeah, I would love to take it in different ways on different views.

✓ So yeah, I would love to photograph different scenes in various ways.

'Take it in different ways on different views' is awkward and unclear. Use the verb 'photograph' or 'take photos of' and 'different scenes' or 'views'. 'In various ways' clearly expresses different techniques or styles.

× I would say umm, Arabian areas.

✓ I would say urban areas.

The student likely intended 'urban' not 'Arabian'. 'Arabian' is an adjective relating to Arabia and is a semantic error rather than a grammar preposition mistake; corrected to 'urban areas' to answer the question about urban vs rural. If the student actually meant a cultural region, they should say 'Arabian areas', but that doesn't fit the question. Keep vocabulary appropriate to the question.

× It feels like the main, the main heart of that city.

✓ They feel like the heart of the city.

Repetition 'the main, the main' is redundant and singular/plural mismatch occurs. 'Views' or 'urban areas' are plural, so use 'they feel'. Simplify to 'the heart of the city'.

× You feel what I'm saying and it's quite phenomenal to take from that side.

✓ You know what I mean, and it's quite phenomenal to photograph from that perspective.

'You feel what I'm saying' is informal; 'you know what I mean' is clearer. 'Take from that side' uses 'take' and 'side' awkwardly; specify 'photograph from that perspective.' Ensure pronouns and nouns match intended meaning.

× And normally I found it a crazy heart in my country, specific in my city, but there is a city we call it in Yom.

✓ Normally I find my country has a vibrant heart, especially in my city, but there is a city called Yom.

Tense inconsistency: 'found' (past) vs 'normally' (habitual) — use 'find'. 'Specific' should be 'especially' and 'a crazy heart' is informal and vague; 'vibrant heart' is clearer. 'There is a city we call it in Yom' is ungrammatical; use 'there is a city called Yom.' Remove unnecessary pronoun 'it.'

× They have a beautiful and spectacular nature over there.

✓ It has beautiful and spectacular natural scenery there.

'They have' is incorrect for a city (singular); use 'it has'. 'Nature' as uncountable is awkward here; 'natural scenery' or 'natural landscapes' is more natural. Keep adjective order simple and ensure subject matches verb.

× But for me so far, I found the foreigners countries really fascinating.

✓ But for me so far, I find foreign countries really fascinating.

'So far' suggests a present perspective and habitual opinion, so present simple 'find' is appropriate rather than past 'found'. 'Foreigners countries' is incorrect; use 'foreign countries' (adjective+noun). Ensure tense matches the speaker's current opinion.