Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise, and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct singular/plural and article errors (e.g., “a picture,” “nature,” “Scandinavian scenes”), and avoid repeating ideas. Use varied vocabulary like “sunsets,” “landscapes,” or “scenery.”

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and natural landscapes because the changing light creates striking colors and moods. In particular, I like capturing coastal sunsets where the sky reflects on the water, which makes each photo feel unique.

Sugestão: Answer directly (avoid starting with “Yes” when the question asks a preference), fix grammar and word choice, and use linking words to connect reasons. Be specific about what you like in rural views (e.g., fields, hills, open skies) and avoid filler words. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views to urban ones because there is less air pollution and the scenery feels more peaceful. For instance, I enjoy walking through open fields and looking at rolling hills under a wide sky, which helps me relax.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly then support with specific, accurately worded details. Correct vocabulary (e.g., “scenic places,” “breathtaking waterfalls”), verb forms, and avoid vague phrasing like “I would like to learn.” Use linking phrases such as “for example” or “in particular.”

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because we have many scenic places like lush forests and breathtaking waterfalls. For example, I often visit national parks to watch sunsets over the hills, which I find very peaceful and restorative.

× Yes, I enjoy taking picture of different views around me.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views around me.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking pictures of different views' refers to multiple instances. Use plural when referring to more than one item or repeated action. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' when speaking about multiple photos or the general activity of photographing various scenes.

× Especially I like taking pictures of sunsets, natures and every Scandinavian around me.

✓ Especially I like taking pictures of sunsets, nature and every Scandinavian around me.

The noun 'natures' is incorrect; 'nature' is an uncountable noun and should be singular. 'Every Scandinavian' is awkward but grammatically singular; likely the student meant 'every scene' or 'every landscape.' Suggestion: Use 'nature' for the environment in general. If referring to multiple natural scenes, say 'natural scenes' or 'landscapes.'

× Especially sunsets has changed many colors and lights and each shop feel very unique for me.

✓ Especially sunsets have changed many colors and lights and each shot feels very unique to me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'sunsets' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has.' 'Each shop' is likely a mistake for 'each shot' (a photo), and 'each' requires a singular verb 'feels.' Also use 'unique to me' not 'for me.' Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with plural or singular subjects and check word choice ('shot' for photo).

× Yes, I prefer views in rural area rather than in urban area because there is less air pollution and the secondary looks more peaceful.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in rural areas rather than in urban areas because there is less air pollution and the scenery looks more peaceful.

Countable nouns require plural forms when speaking generally: use 'rural areas' and 'urban areas.' 'Secondary' is incorrect word choice; intended word is 'scenery.' Suggestion: Use plural forms when referring to areas in general and use the correct word 'scenery' for landscape appearance.

× I enjoy walking uh around fields in countryside and looking at the hill between fresh air.

✓ I enjoy walking around fields in the countryside and looking at the hills in the fresh air.

Use definite/indefinite articles correctly: 'the countryside' is standard. 'Hill' should be plural 'hills' if general, and the phrase 'in the fresh air' is the correct expression. Also remove filler 'uh.' Suggestion: Use 'the countryside' for the concept and 'in the fresh air' to describe the atmosphere.

× I prefer views in my own country to those in other country because we have many scanning place such as lush forests and breathaking waterfall.

✓ I prefer views in my own country to those in other countries because we have many scenic places such as lush forests and breathtaking waterfalls.

Plural forms are needed: 'other countries,' 'scenic places,' and 'waterfalls.' 'Scanning place' is incorrect — intended word is 'scenic place' or 'scenic places.' Also 'breathtaking' was misspelled. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to multiple examples and choose the correct adjective 'scenic' and spelling 'breathtaking.'

× For example, I would like to learn, visit several national parks and watch the sunset over the hills, which I find very peaceful.

✓ For example, I would like to visit several national parks and watch the sunset over the hills, which I find very peaceful.

The verb list 'learn, visit' is incorrect here; 'learn' is unnecessary and unconnected. The sentence should simply list intended activities: 'visit several national parks and watch the sunset.' Suggestion: Remove unrelated verbs; use parallel verb structure when listing activities.