Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Améliorez la fluidité et la clarté de votre réponse en supprimant les hésitations et les répétitions, et en complétant les phrases inachevées. Donnez un exemple concret et bref en une ou deux phrases supplémentaires. Travaillez la prononciation des mots clés et la structure sujet-verbe pour éviter les erreurs comme « photograph of ».

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures because they capture special moments and help me remember how I felt. For example, I often photograph friends at gatherings to preserve the atmosphere and candid expressions.

Sugestão: Réduisez les hésitations (« uh », répétitions) et organisez votre réponse en une phrase principale claire suivie d’un détail explicatif. Utilisez des mots précis pour finir vos exemples (par ex. « glass skyscrapers ») et évitez les coupures. Pratiquez des phrases simples mais complètes pour exprimer la préférence et la raison.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because I admire modern architecture and dramatic city skylines. For example, I enjoy photographing glass skyscrapers that reflect light at sunset.

Sugestão: Clarifiez le discours en évitant les hésitations et en corrigeant les erreurs lexicales (ex. « desserts » → « deserts », « Siri » confusion). Structurez la réponse avec une phrase sur votre pays suivie d’une comparaison claire avec d’autres pays, en complétant les idées incomplètes. Donnez des détails concrets (exemples de sites ou éléments architecturaux).

Exemplo: I appreciate views in my country, Tunisia, because it offers diverse landscapes from deserts and green oases to historic medinas. However, I also admire places like Japan and Greece for their distinctive architecture and rich cultural atmospheres, such as Kyoto’s temples and Santorini’s whitewashed buildings.

× Yes I do, I love taking pictures because they capture and preserve special moments that so I can remember how I felt later.

✓ Yes, I do. I love taking pictures because they capture and preserve special moments so I can remember how I felt later.

The original sentence had an extraneous word 'that' before 'so', which disrupted the sentence flow. Remove 'that' and separate into two sentences with proper punctuation. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and a period after 'do' to improve clarity. Suggestion: Use 'so' to show purpose without inserting 'that'.

× Uh, for example, I photograph of friends gathering and.

✓ For example, I photograph friends gathering.

The phrase 'photograph of' is incorrect here; we use the verb 'photograph' with a direct object: 'photograph friends'. The trailing conjunction 'and' is incomplete and should be removed. Use a full stop to finish the sentence. Suggestion: Ensure verb-object structure and avoid dangling conjunctions.

× Uh, well, I, I pref, although I love, uh, rural, rural landscapes, I prefer views in urban areas because uh, they, uh, because I admire modern architecture and dramatic city skylines, uh, for example, glass.

✓ Well, although I love rural landscapes, I prefer views in urban areas because I admire modern architecture and dramatic city skylines, for example, glass buildings.

The original sentence is disfluent, repeats words, and contains an incomplete fragment 'for example, glass.' Clean up repetition ('I, I', 'rural, rural') and remove filler words. Place the concessive clause 'although I love rural landscapes' before the main clause for clarity. Complete the example by adding a noun: 'glass buildings.' Suggestion: Reduce fillers, avoid repetition, and ensure examples are complete.

× Well, I love, uh, Tunisia, Siri because it's very diverse from desserts and uh, and green, uh, Oasis to historic towns with, uh, rich heritage.

✓ Well, I love Tunisia because it's very diverse, from deserts and green oases to historic towns with rich heritage.

There are multiple issues: incorrect spelling 'Siri' and 'desserts' (should be 'oases' for plural of 'oasis'), unnecessary fillers and commas. Use 'from... to...' structure correctly and pluralize 'oasis' to 'oases'. Remove filler 'uh' and correct spelling. Suggestion: Proofread for spelling and use correct plural forms.

× However, I increasingly admire, uh, architecture and cultural ambience in Japanese, Japan and Greece because they invest in their.

✓ However, I increasingly admire the architecture and cultural ambience of Japan and Greece because they invest in their cultural heritage.

Use 'of' to link 'architecture and cultural ambience' to countries: 'of Japan and Greece.' Remove the extraneous word 'Japanese' before 'Japan'. The clause 'because they invest in their' is incomplete; specify 'cultural heritage' as the object. Suggestion: Ensure prepositions correctly connect nouns and complete dependent clauses.