Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer grammatically correct, more concise, and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid filler sounds (e.g., "umm").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph cityscapes and family gatherings because the photos help me recall special moments and the atmosphere of those events.

Sugestão: Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'views' not 'reviews') and combine short sentences to improve fluency. Use one linking word to connect your reason and give a specific detail or example about what you like in rural views.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because I find them more peaceful and refreshing. For instance, I enjoy photographing green fields and traditional houses since they remind me of my hometown and help me relax.

Sugestão: Make the response smoother by removing hesitations and balancing the comparison with a clear linking phrase. Give one concrete example of what you would like to experience abroad to support your statement.

Exemplo: I love the views in my own country, but I also want to see landscapes and cultural sites abroad to broaden my perspective. For example, I would like to visit European cities to photograph historic architecture and learn about different traditions.

× Well, actually one of my hobbies are taking pictures since umm, it may, it keeps memories.

✓ Well, actually one of my hobbies is taking pictures, since, umm, it may keep memories.

The subject 'one of my hobbies' is singular and requires the singular verb 'is' not 'are'. Also 'keeps' should be 'keep' because it refers to 'it may' (modal + base verb) or better 'may keep' as a modal construction. Suggestion: use 'one of my hobbies is' and 'may keep' for correct subject-verb agreement and modal verb structure.

× You can take a look at it, take a look back and remember all the things that you have done just from those pictures.

✓ You can take a look back and remember all the things that you have done just from those pictures.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and unclear after 'take a look at it' because the next phrase 'take a look back' already expresses the idea. Removing 'it' makes the sentence clearer. Suggestion: omit vague pronouns when the referent is clear from context.

× I love reviews from rural areas.

✓ I love views from rural areas.

The student used 'reviews' (evaluations) instead of the intended noun 'views' (scenery). This is a word choice error (adjective/noun confusion). Suggestion: use the correct lexical item 'views' when talking about scenery.

× I am more in tune with this UMM kind of places.

✓ I am more in tune with these kinds of places.

The demonstrative and noun number must agree: 'this...places' is incorrect. Use 'these' for plural and 'kinds of places' or 'kind of place' for agreement. Suggestion: match demonstrative to noun number and use 'kinds of' with plural.

× It makes me feel and UMM makes me remember my home or my community.

✓ It makes me feel refreshed and makes me remember my home and my community.

The original sentence has awkward repetition and a misplaced conjunction. Remove the extra 'and' after 'feel' and align the verbs: 'makes me feel refreshed and makes me remember...' Also use 'and' to join 'home and my community' for parallel structure. Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and avoid filler 'umm' in written corrections.

× I do love the views in my own country, but I also want to experience umm, the life, the culture from other countries to expand my perspective beyond my own country.

✓ I do love the views in my own country, but I also want to experience the life and culture of other countries to expand my perspective beyond my own country.

Use 'of other countries' rather than 'from other countries' when referring to 'life and culture' belonging to those countries. Also combine 'life and culture' with 'and' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: prefer 'life and culture of' when showing possession or association.