Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences, avoid filler sounds (umm, like) and repeated phrases. Also correct simple grammar (use present tense: ‘I take’ not ‘I took’).

Exemplo: Yes. I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially natural scenery. For example, when I visit scenic spots I often photograph mountains and lakes because their colours and light change throughout the day, which makes each picture unique.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons connected with linking words (because, so, therefore). Remove hesitations and self-corrections. Use concise vocabulary to explain benefits (relaxation, fresh air, quiet).

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas. Because I work in a busy city like Hong Kong, rural landscapes help me relax and reduce stress. Also, the fresh air and quiet countryside allow me to enjoy nature more fully and take better photographs.

Sugestão: Answer directly with correct phrasing (‘other countries’), then give one or two specific examples and concrete reasons. Avoid vague words (‘you know’, ‘tranche’) and pronunciation errors; use precise vocabulary (scenery, serenity). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries. For example, I like rural Japan because its landscapes—such as rice terraces and quiet forests—offer beautiful scenery and a peaceful atmosphere that I don’t often find in Hong Kong.

× Yes, I took a lot of pictures actually and one of my habits is actually photography.

✓ Yes, I take a lot of pictures actually and one of my habits is photography.

The student used past tense 'took' which conflicts with the present habit described by 'one of my habits is photography'. This is a present-tense general habit, so the verb should be in the simple present 'take'. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and habits (I take pictures, I often take pictures).

× So normally, umm, I like taking pictures of some like umm, natural scenery views umm, for example, like whenever I went, I go to the umm, some scenery spots, so I, I, I, I took pictures of them and then, for example the.

✓ So normally I like taking pictures of natural scenery; for example, whenever I go to some scenic spots I take pictures of them.

Multiple tense inconsistencies: 'whenever I went' (past) should be 'whenever I go' to match habitual action; 'I, I, I, I took pictures' should be 'I take pictures'. Use simple present for repeated or habitual actions. Remove redundant fillers. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use 'scenic spots' rather than 'scenery spots'.

× Umm, definitely the rural areas because like for my work, I, umm, work in a city like I, I, I work in Hong Kong, which is a, which is a metropolitan.

✓ Umm, definitely rural areas because for my work I work in a city; I work in Hong Kong, which is a metropolitan city.

Redundant repetition and slight word choice issue: 'a metropolitan' is incomplete — use 'a metropolitan city' or 'a metropolis'. The sentence otherwise uses present tense correctly but needs clearer noun choice and removal of repeated 'I'. Suggestion: simplify and use 'metropolitan city' or 'a metropolis'.

× And then for the rural areas, I can really help, it can really help me to release my stress through viewing those very stunning views, the natural views.

✓ And then in rural areas it really helps me to relieve my stress by viewing those stunning natural scenes.

Problems: incorrect subject reference 'I can really help, it can really help me' and awkward verb phrase 'release my stress'. Use 'it helps me' (clear subject 'it' referring to rural areas or being there) and 'relieve my stress' for idiomatic English. Also replace 'views, the natural views' with 'stunning natural scenes'. Suggestion: choose one clear subject and use 'relieve' not 'release'.

× Umm, I would say you're another country because just as I said, I work in Hong Kong and actually Hong Kong it just, it, it is a city of very, like many, many urban views.

✓ Umm, I would say another country because, as I said, I work in Hong Kong, and Hong Kong is a city with many urban sights.

Errors: 'you're another country' is incorrect pronoun use — should be 'another country'; extra filler 'it just, it, it is' should be 'is'; 'urban views' is better expressed as 'urban sights'. Suggestion: remove fillers and use correct pronoun and concise phrasing.

× So I prefer those, umm, other country, for example, like Japan, especially the rural areas in Japan, you can really feel the, you know, the scenarity and the serenity and also the tranche.

✓ So I prefer other countries; for example, Japan, especially the rural areas, where you can really feel the scenery and the serenity.

Problems: 'those, umm, other country' mixes plural and singular — should be 'other countries' or 'another country'. 'You can really feel the scenarity' — 'scenarity' is not a correct noun; use 'scenery'. 'The tranche' is incorrect and unclear; it should be removed. Also use a relative clause 'where you can' to connect idea. Suggestion: use 'other countries', 'scenery', and avoid nonstandard words.