Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Use linking words to connect ideas and choose varied vocabulary (e.g., 'capture', 'scenery', 'memories'). Also avoid contractions in formal test settings.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of new places because I like to capture memories and interesting scenery. For example, when I visited Kyoto I photographed temple gardens to remember the tranquil atmosphere and unique architecture.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct topic sentence and support it with specific details and a linking word. Explain what aspects of urban views you like (architecture, street life, lights) and give a brief example to illustrate your point.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because the city atmosphere feels lively and inspiring. For instance, I enjoy photographing city streets at night when neon signs and busy shops create dynamic scenes that motivate me to explore.

Sugestão: Provide a clearer reason and a concrete example. Replace vague phrases like 'hits different' with specific descriptions (e.g., 'offer new cultural styles, landscapes, or architecture'). Use a linking phrase to expand your idea and keep responses to no more than four sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultural scenes and landscapes that I haven't seen before. For example, traveling to Morocco I was fascinated by the vibrant markets and desert vistas, which inspired me to take many unique photographs.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views in a new place or a city 'cause I just wanna keep memories and it's beautiful the way the scenery is so beautiful.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views in a new place or a city because I want to keep memories; the scenery is beautiful.

Errors: redundant phrase 'it's beautiful the way the scenery is so beautiful' (repetition) and informal contractions ('wanna', ''cause'). Also sentence is wordy and slightly ungrammatical in the second clause. Correction uses 'because' and 'want to' for standard grammar and replaces the redundant clause with 'the scenery is beautiful'. Suggestion: avoid informal contractions in formal speech, remove redundant words, and ensure each clause has clear structure. Grammar problem type ID:10

× I actually much prefer urban places because it is more lively and it's like you're in a busy place that gives you motivation.

✓ I actually much prefer urban places because they are livelier and being in a busy area motivates me.

Errors: mismatch in number and pronoun reference ('it is more lively' referring to plural 'places') and informal 'it's like you're' which is vague. Also 'gives you motivation' is informal and awkward. Correction uses plural verb 'they are' and comparative 'livelier'; rephrases 'being in a busy area motivates me' for clarity. Suggestion: match subject and verb number, use direct phrasing rather than 'it's like'. Grammar problem type ID:16

× I much prefer views in other countries because it hits different and I experience new things.

✓ I much prefer views in other countries because they feel different and I experience new things.

Errors: pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'views' and idiomatic expression 'hits different' is informal/slang. Use 'they feel different' to match plural and standard English. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number with its antecedent and avoid slang in formal responses. Grammar problem type ID:6