Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid tense and form errors (e.g., "I grew up" not "I always grow up"; "has stuck with me" not "has sticked"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Photography has been a hobby since I was a child, and I often practiced by photographing my younger brother, which helped me learn composition and lighting. As a result, I still carry a camera whenever I travel.

Sugestão: Improve grammar, sentence structure and use linking words for contrast. Begin with a clear preference statement, then give two specific reasons with correct comparative forms and vocabulary (e.g., "calmer," "prettier," "less pollution"). Avoid repetition and awkward phrases like "more does more light."

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they are calmer and generally prettier, with less pollution. In contrast, cities are busier and have more artificial light, which can spoil natural scenery.

Sugestão: Make the answer more precise and avoid repetition. State your preference, give a specific example with a concise reason, and use linking words like "for example" and "because." Correct awkward phrasing (e.g., "it is something that I think it is something").

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country, for example the Himalayas, because the dramatic mountains and cultural scenery feel unique and familiar to me. Many people visit to climb and photograph the peaks, and I find those landscapes especially beautiful.

× I always grow up taking pictures of my younger brother and it has sticked with me throughout.

✓ I grew up taking pictures of my younger brother and it has stuck with me throughout.

The verbs 'grow' and 'stick' are used incorrectly. 'Grow' referring to a past habitual action should be in simple past 'grew' (Past tense issue - ID 5). 'Sticked' is not the past participle of 'stick'; the correct past participle is 'stuck' (Verb in the past participle form - ID 9). Use 'grew' to indicate past upbringing, and 'has stuck' (present perfect) to show that the habit continues to affect the present. Suggestion: Use 'I grew up...' for past life experience and 'has stuck' as present perfect with correct past participle 'stuck'.

× I prefer views in rural areas I feel like it is more calm, it is more prettier and there are less pollutions.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I feel they are calmer, prettier, and there is less pollution.

This sentence has multiple errors: it lacks a conjunction or proper punctuation after 'areas' making it a run-on (Sentence structure errors - ID 26). 'More calm' should be comparative adjective 'calmer' (Comparative form; mapped to Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs - ID 13), not 'more calmer'. 'More prettier' is ungrammatical; use 'prettier' (ID 13). 'There are less pollutions' is wrong: 'pollution' is an uncountable noun so use 'less pollution' and 'there is' (Incorrect use of quantifiers/article and singular/plural - IDs 14 and 1). Also refer to 'views' (plural) so use plural pronoun 'they'. Suggestion: Connect clauses with 'because' or use a comma and conjunction; use comparatives 'calmer' and 'prettier'; use 'less pollution' with singular verb 'is'.

× While in the city it is more busy and more does more light so I do generally prefer.

✓ In the city it is busier and there is more light, so I generally prefer the countryside.

'More busy' should be the comparative 'busier' (Third person singular/comparative adjective issue - ID 2/13). 'More does more light' is ungrammatical: use 'there is more light' (There be issue - ID 3). 'I do generally prefer' is awkward; adverb placement should be 'I generally prefer' (Incorrect adverb placement - ID 20). Also clarify the preference object: 'the countryside' or 'rural areas'. Suggestion: Use comparative adjectives 'busier', 'there is more light', and place adverbs before the main verb: 'I generally prefer'.

× I prefer views in my own country, for instance Himalaya.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, for instance the Himalayas.

Place names like 'Himalaya' typically use the plural 'the Himalayas' and require the definite article 'the' (Incorrect use of the definite article / Article errors - IDs 17 and 22). Also 'for instance' should be followed by a noun phrase; 'the Himalayas' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'the Himalayas' when referring to the mountain range and include the definite article.

× People go there just to climb, just to take pictures and it is something that I think it is something that is beautiful and I think it is the most beautiful thing.

✓ People go there just to climb or to take pictures, and I think it is very beautiful; in my opinion, it is one of the most beautiful places.

This sentence is repetitive and has poor structure: 'it is something that I think it is something that is beautiful' repeats phrases redundantly (Sentence structure errors - ID 26). 'It is the most beautiful thing' is vague and may be an overgeneralization; 'one of the most beautiful places' is clearer and more natural (Comparative/superlative nuance - ID 25). Use conjunctions properly and avoid repetition. Suggestion: Combine ideas clearly ('People go there to climb or take pictures') and express opinion concisely ('I think it is very beautiful' or 'one of the most beautiful places').