Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and slightly reduce repetition; structure the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammatical issues (e.g., “sceneries” → “scenery”, avoid repeating “I love”).

Exemplo: I love taking photos of different views because landscape photography relaxes me and lets me capture memories. For example, I enjoy hiking to mountain viewpoints to photograph wide panoramas, and I often experiment with angles and lighting to improve each shot. I also share select photos on social media, which motivates me when friends give positive feedback.

Sugestão: Give a clear, complete topic sentence and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to present reasons and a brief example. Be specific about what you like (e.g., skyline, light reflections) and finish the thought to avoid hesitation.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because city skylines and illuminated architecture create a striking, dynamic scene. For instance, at night the lights reflecting on glass buildings and rivers produce dramatic contrasts, which I find more exciting than the quiet simplicity of rural landscapes.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “I have travelled to almost every part of my country”; avoid “washing the views”). Make a clear comparison: state preference, give reasons with linking words, and include a short specific example. Remove filler words like “uh.”

Exemplo: I enjoy views in other countries more because they offer different cultural landmarks and architectural styles. Although I have travelled to most parts of my own country, I’d like to visit London to photograph iconic sights such as the Tower Bridge and the London Eye, which would look impressive against the Thames at sunset.

× Yes, I absolutely love taking pictures of beautiful sceneries, mountains, landscape views because it is such an interesting hobby for me.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love taking pictures of beautiful scenery, mountains, and landscapes because it is such an interesting hobby for me.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use 'landscapes' (plural) for countable views. Also add 'and' before the last item in a list for clarity and include commas to separate items. Suggestion: Replace 'beautiful sceneries' with 'beautiful scenery', keep 'mountains', and change 'landscape views' to 'landscapes'.

× And I also love sharing it on social media with my friends and I love whenever they appreciate me.

✓ I also love sharing them on social media with my friends, and I appreciate it when they compliment me.

Avoid starting sentences with 'And' in formal speech; combine clauses for clarity. 'Sharing it' is incorrect because 'pictures' is plural, so use 'sharing them'. 'I love whenever they appreciate me' is awkward: use 'I appreciate it when they compliment me' to convey the idea clearly. Suggestion: Use plural pronoun agreement and smoother clause linking.

× And I also experiment trying different angles to get a perfect shot.

✓ I also experiment with different angles to get the perfect shot.

Use the correct collocation 'experiment with' rather than 'experiment trying'. Also 'a perfect shot' can be 'the perfect shot' for intention; both are acceptable but 'the' is more natural here. Suggestion: Use 'experiment with different angles'.

× I'll definitely pick the views from an urban area because there is something different about the city skyline, especially at night, the architecture and the lights that it exhibits and it gives such a vibe.

✓ I'll definitely pick views from an urban area because there is something special about the city skyline, especially at night: the architecture and the lights create a unique vibe.

The original is wordy and has awkward clauses. 'There is something different' is acceptable but 'special' is more natural. 'That it exhibits' is unnecessary and ungrammatical between clauses. Replace with a clearer structure: 'the architecture and the lights create a unique vibe.' Use a colon or conjunction to link the explanation. Suggestion: Simplify and use active verb 'create' to connect subject and effect.

× It creates something in us, which is.

✓ It creates a feeling in us.

The original ends with a fragment 'which is.' This is incomplete. Replace the fragment with a complete noun phrase such as 'a feeling in us' or 'a certain mood' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× Although I love my country and I have been travel almost every side of my country, I would still love, uh, going and travelling to other countries and washing the views from there.

✓ Although I love my country and have travelled to almost every part of it, I would still love to go and travel to other countries and see the views there.

Use the present perfect 'have travelled' (not 'have been travel'). 'Almost every side of my country' is awkward; use 'almost every part of it'. 'Would still love, uh, going and travelling' is incorrect: use 'would still love to go and travel'. 'Washing the views' is incorrect word choice; use 'see the views.' Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and collocations: 'have travelled', 'go and travel', 'see the views'.

× Especially I wanted to travel to London and watch the beautiful views of the London Bridge and the London Eye and everything there.

✓ In particular, I want to travel to London and see the beautiful views of Tower Bridge, the London Eye, and everything there.

Context of preferences uses present/future desire; use 'want to' or 'would like to' instead of past 'wanted'. 'Watch the beautiful views' is unnatural; use 'see the beautiful views'. Also 'London Bridge' is commonly confused with 'Tower Bridge' — if meaning the famous picturesque bridge, 'Tower Bridge' is more likely. List items with commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'want to' or 'would like to' for current desires and 'see' for viewing sights.