Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also correct minor grammar issues (e.g., "that I have lived" → "that I have experienced"). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I bought a new phone with a good camera, my photos improved a lot, and I started photographing sunsets and cityscapes. This hobby also relaxes me after a busy day.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and use correct grammar ("ancestors have come from" → "ancestors came from"). Use linking words to organize reasons and add one specific example to make the answer more vivid. Avoid unclear phrases like "urban sites"—say "cities" instead.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they remind me of my cultural roots and traditions. For instance, the wide fields and farm animals in my village create a peaceful scene, whereas cities are usually crowded and less green. Therefore, I enjoy the calm and natural beauty of the countryside.

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question (e.g., "I prefer views in my own country because..."). Avoid trailing or incomplete sentences. Add one specific example of a local view and explain why you like it. Correct grammar ("they have an different" is incorrect).

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I know the places well and they feel familiar. For example, every morning I see mist over the nearby hills and farmers working in the fields, which feels peaceful and comforting. Since I haven’t traveled abroad much, I haven’t compared them directly.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views as I can keep them as a memory of all the beautiful moments that I have lived.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I can keep them as memories of all the beautiful moments I have lived.

Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clear cause in spoken answers; 'memory' should be plural 'memories' to match 'all the beautiful moments'; omit unnecessary 'that' and place present perfect 'have lived' directly after 'moments' for natural word order.

× It keeps me calm and as well as it is a skill that I have acquired recently when I got a new mobile phone which has such good camera quality.

✓ It keeps me calm, and it is also a skill I acquired recently when I got a new mobile phone with a very good camera.

Remove awkward 'and as well as' and replace with 'and it is also' for correct coordination; 'acquired recently when I got' should be simplified to 'I acquired recently when I got' and use past simple 'acquired' and 'got' for a past event; 'which has such good camera quality' is awkward — use 'with a very good camera.'

× It has improved my photography skill as well and it has made.

✓ It has also improved my photography skills.

The original is incomplete ('and it has made' has no object). Use present perfect 'has improved' to link to recent change and plural 'skills' is more natural; remove the incomplete clause.

× I prefer views in the rural areas because it connects us to our roots, to our traditions, which makes us understand what our ancestors has come from.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they connect us to our roots and traditions, helping us understand where our ancestors came from.

'the rural areas' can be simplified to 'rural areas'; subject 'views' is plural so verb must be plural 'connect' not 'connects'; 'which makes us understand' is wordy — use 'helping us understand'; 'what our ancestors has come from' is ungrammatical and should be 'where our ancestors came from' with past tense 'came' and correct pronoun 'where.'

× Also, it includes a lot of fields and animals that are only seen in the rural areas and are not available in the urban sites.

✓ Also, they include many fields and animals that are seen only in rural areas and are not found in urban areas.

Match pronoun to plural subject 'views' so use 'they include' not 'it includes'; use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formal tone; 'seen only in rural areas' word order is more natural; 'urban sites' is unnatural — use 'urban areas' or 'cities.'

× I haven't really been anywhere outside my country, but if I talk about the views that are in my country, they are terrific.

✓ I haven't really been anywhere outside my country, but the views in my country are terrific.

Simplify 'if I talk about the views that are in my country' to 'the views in my country' for clarity; tense is appropriate (present perfect for experiences) so keep 'haven't been.'

× In my hometown, there are a lot of views that I have experienced every morning.

✓ In my hometown, there are many views I see every morning.

'A lot of' can be replaced with 'many' for concise formal style; 'have experienced every morning' is awkward — use simple present 'see every morning' for habitual actions.

× Every morning they have an different.

✓ Every morning they look different.

Original is incomplete and ungrammatical ('have an different' is wrong: 'different' needs a noun or be used predicatively). If meaning is that the views change daily, use 'they look different every morning' or 'they change every morning.' Here 'they look different' is concise.