Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and grammatical errors, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Also avoid overlong phrases and correct verb forms (e.g., 'I am fascinated by' not 'I really fascinate about').

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I often photograph sunrises and sunsets because I find the light very beautiful; for example, last month I captured a sunrise over the river which made me feel calm and inspired.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid filler phrases. Use a clear topic sentence, then add a linked specific reason or example. Fix minor grammar and complete sentences (avoid trailing off).

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas. Because of the abundant greenery and quiet atmosphere, I can focus on composition more easily; for instance, I enjoy photographing misty fields early in the morning when there are unforgettable colors.

Sugestão: Be direct and remove fillers. Start with a clear statement, then give a specific supporting reason and an example using linking words. Replace vague phrases like 'sense of community' with a brief concrete image.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of home and local culture; for example, watching coastal villages at sunset makes me feel connected and relaxed, unlike unfamiliar tourist spots.

× I really fascinate about taking my pictures of breathtaking views which help me focused and relaxed.

✓ I am really fascinated by taking pictures of breathtaking views, which help me feel focused and relaxed.

The student used 'fascinate' incorrectly; 'fascinate' is an active verb meaning to interest someone, but here the passive/adjective 'fascinated' or the verb phrase 'am fascinated by' is needed. Also 'fascinate about' is incorrect preposition usage; the correct pattern is 'fascinated by'. 'Taking my pictures' is wordy and unnatural; 'taking pictures' is preferred. 'Help me focused' is incorrect because after 'help' we need the base form 'feel' or the adjective with 'feel' (help me feel focused). The correction fixes verb form, preposition, and structure. Suggestion: use 'I am fascinated by' or 'I really enjoy taking pictures' and use 'help me feel focused and relaxed' to maintain correct verb forms.

× I usually take the pictures of the sunset and the sunrise.

✓ I usually take pictures of the sunset and the sunrise.

The phrase 'the pictures' is unnecessary when speaking generally; use the zero article 'pictures' for general activities. This is an article usage/noun phrase naturalness issue aligned with present simple habitual tense. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: say 'I usually take pictures of the sunset and the sunrise.'

× I have not thought about it yet but if I have to choose one I would definitely go for rural areas because of the greenery all around and the calm and the peaceful environment.

✓ I have not thought about it yet, but if I had to choose one I would definitely go for rural areas because of the greenery and the calm, peaceful environment.

The original mixes present perfect 'have not thought' with a hypothetical conditional using 'if I have to choose', which is incorrect. For a hypothetical choice, use the past tense 'if I had to choose' with 'would'. Also 'the calm and the peaceful environment' is wordy and has unnecessary articles; combine adjectives 'calm, peaceful environment'. Suggestion: use consistent conditional form: 'if I had to choose... I would'.

× I believe I would have the best uh sceneries if.

✓ I believe I would have the best scenery.

The sentence is incomplete and uses 'sceneries' which is rarely used in English; the uncountable noun 'scenery' is preferred. The trailing 'if' makes it a fragment; remove it to complete the thought. Suggestion: finish the idea or omit the 'if' and use 'I believe I would have the best scenery.'

× I love to watch, uh, the views in my own country because I can feel the sense of community, umm, and can feel calm and relaxed.

✓ I love to look at the views in my own country because I can feel a sense of community and feel calm and relaxed.

'Watch the views' is unnatural; 'look at the views' or 'see the views' is better. 'The sense of community' can be 'a sense of community' when speaking generally. Also avoid repeating 'can feel'; use 'and feel calm and relaxed.' Suggestion: use 'look at' and 'a sense of community' for natural phrasing.