Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fix grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fragments and incomplete phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel, I often photograph landscapes because they inspire me; for example, my phone contains photos of mountains, seas, sunsets and sunrises from recent trips.

Sugestão: Correct vocabulary and grammar, and organize into a clear two-part answer: state preference then give reasons with linking words. Avoid unclear single words and repetition.

Exemplo: I definitely prefer rural views to urban ones. Because I grew up in a big city, I'm tired of its skyline; therefore when I travel I choose countryside scenes for their peace and natural beauty.

Sugestão: Use clear, accurate language and complete sentences. Begin with your preference, then give specific examples and link them logically. Avoid unclear pronouns and fillers.

Exemplo: I like views in my own country because it offers a lot of variety. For instance, the western coast has beautiful blue bays, while the eastern region features enormous mountains, so I can enjoy both seaside and alpine scenery.

× I rarely take photos in my daily life, yet when I travel I can resist taking pictures of landscapes that excite me.

✓ I rarely take photos in my daily life, yet when I travel I cannot resist taking pictures of landscapes that excite me.

The issue is incorrect modal construction: 'can resist' contradicts intended meaning. This is a usage issue of modal/verb form (Modal verb usage / present participle nuance). Replace 'can' with 'cannot' to express inability to resist. Also keep 'taking' as present participle after 'cannot resist.' Improve by noting intended meaning before speaking and choosing the correct negative modal.

× For example, on my phone you can find shots such as mountains, seas, sunsets, sunrises and. The machine.

✓ For example, on my phone you can find shots such as mountains, seas, sunsets and sunrises.

This sentence is fragmented and contains an extraneous fragment 'The machine.' Remove the fragment and correct punctuation and word order to list items clearly. Ensure parallel structure in list and avoid leftover sentence fragments.

× Bachelor.

✓ I studied for a bachelor's degree.

Single word 'Bachelor.' is not a complete answer and misuses a noun without context. Provide a full sentence and correct pronoun/possessive usage to convey the student's meaning. Use 'I studied for a bachelor's degree' or 'I have a bachelor's degree.' depending on intended meaning.

× I definitely prefer viewers in rural areas.

✓ I definitely prefer views in rural areas.

The student used 'viewers' (people who view) instead of 'views' (scenery). This is a wrong word choice (lexical error). Replace with the correct noun 'views.' Read questions carefully and choose the noun that matches meaning.

× Actually I can't remember the last time I take the photos of urban areas because I've been grown in in a big city.

✓ Actually I can't remember the last time I took photos of urban areas because I was brought up in a big city.

Mixed tense and wrong verb forms: After 'can't remember the last time' use past simple 'took.' Also 'I've been grown in' is incorrect passive; use 'was brought up' or 'I grew up' to express upbringing. Remove duplicate 'in.' Use consistent past reference for past events.

× So I'm sick and tired of the the urban views and therefore when I travel through. Open.

✓ So I'm sick and tired of the urban views and therefore when I travel I prefer open countryside.

Sentence fragments and repetition: duplicate 'the the' and fragment 'when I travel through. Open.' Rephrase into a complete sentence: state consequence and complete idea about preferring open countryside. Ensure no fragments and correct article use.

× But he made no mistake.

✓ But my country has no shortage of beautiful scenery.

'But he made no mistake.' is irrelevant and misuses pronoun 'he.' Likely intended to say country offers many views. Replace with an appropriate sentence referring to the country. Use correct subject noun rather than 'he.'

× My country presents me numerous charming views.

✓ My country offers me numerous charming views.

Verb 'presents me' is awkward here; 'offers' or 'has' is more natural. This is a lexical/pronoun-object collocation issue. Use 'offers' or 'has' to sound native and ensure correct object 'numerous charming views.'

× Umm, for example, he has serious with bushes of blue on the western coast.

✓ For example, it has stretches of blue bushes on the western coast.

Confusing pronoun 'he' for 'it' (the country) and unclear phrase 'serious with bushes of blue.' Replace with clearer noun phrase 'stretches of blue bushes' or 'coastal areas with blue shrubs.' Ensure subject-pronoun agreement and clear noun phrases.

× On the other hand, he has enormous mountains in the eastern region.

✓ On the other hand, it has enormous mountains in the eastern region.

Wrong pronoun 'he' used for the country; use 'it' for inanimate subjects. This is a pronoun error and agreement with the noun. Also 'enormous mountains' is fine once pronoun corrected.

× Yet there.

✓ Yet there are many different landscapes to enjoy.

Fragment 'Yet there.' is incomplete. Expand to a full sentence conveying contrast and meaning. Use 'there are' to introduce existence of landscapes and complete the thought.