Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and includes a clear personal detail, but the first sentence is very long and contains several grammar and phrasing problems. Say “I didn’t have one myself” instead of “not mind personally,” and avoid repeating “every evening.” Use linking words such as “because” and “as a result” to organize your explanation. Also, answer the question in the present tense first, because the question asks whether you often ride a bicycle now.

Exemplo: Not very often nowadays, although I used to ride a bicycle almost every evening as a child. Many of my friends and neighbours had bicycles, so we would meet up and ride around the neighbourhood together. I really enjoyed it, but I usually take public transport now.

Sugestão: You provide relevant reasons and useful details about buses and taxis, but the opening phrase is unnatural: say “The cheapest and most convenient form of transport in my area is road transport.” Avoid repeating “convenient,” “fast,” and “swift,” because they have similar meanings. Use a clear topic sentence followed by two or three well-connected reasons, and correct the final sentence by saying “I can store my luggage and relax during the journey.”

Exemplo: I usually travel by bus or taxi because they are the cheapest and most convenient options in my area. Buses are affordable, while taxis are faster when I am in a hurry. Both are fairly comfortable, and I can store my luggage easily.

Sugestão: You answer directly and express a clear preference, but “window side” should be “by the window” or “in a window seat.” The phrase “feel the wind taking air” is unclear and unnatural; say “feel the breeze” or “enjoy the fresh air.” The final sentence is incomplete and repeats the main idea, so replace it with a specific reason, such as enjoying the scenery or feeling less confined.

Exemplo: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window when I travel. I enjoy looking at the scenery and watching the landscape change along the way. It also makes me feel more relaxed and gives me a sense of freedom.

Sugestão: You include a specific memory and sensory details, which is effective, but the answer needs a clearer structure and more accurate grammar. Say “I remember taking a three-hour journey to a relative’s wedding” instead of “For one long journey I remember we took” and “the IT was.” “The wind was relaxing” is less natural than “The breeze was refreshing.” Answer the question directly at the beginning and explain who travelled with you and why the journey was memorable.

Exemplo: Yes, I remember taking a three-hour journey with my family to attend a relative’s wedding when I was a child. Although I was quite introverted and did not travel much, I really enjoyed that trip. The breeze was refreshing, and I loved looking at the scenery along the way, so it was a memorable experience.

× although not mind personally

✓ although I personally did not mind it

The original phrase lacks a subject and uses the verb mind incorrectly. A complete clause needs the subject I and the past-tense form did not mind because the speaker is describing childhood experiences.

× my friends had one my neighbors also had

✓ my friends had bicycles, and my neighbors did too

The original contains two clauses joined without a conjunction or punctuation. Use and to join the clauses, and use did too to avoid repeating the verb had.

× so it would just come together and play to ride your bicycle

✓ so we would all get together to ride our bicycles

The original has an unclear subject and an incorrect structure after play. Use we for the speaker and friends, our for the plural possessive, and get together to ride as the natural verb pattern.

× Cheapest, easiest and the most convenient means of transportation in my area is the road

✓ The cheapest, easiest, and most convenient means of transportation in my area is by road

A superlative phrase used as a noun phrase normally needs the definite article the. The original also uses the road as the means of transportation, but by road is the appropriate prepositional expression for traveling.

× I travel with the bus or a cab

✓ I travel by bus or by cab

Use by with common forms of transportation, such as by bus and by cab. With the bus is not the usual preposition when describing the general method of travel.

× there's a space where you can put your load, you can rest your back is quite comfortable

✓ There is space for your luggage, you can rest your back, and the bus is quite comfortable

The original joins several independent clauses with commas and is therefore structurally unclear. Separate or correctly coordinate the clauses with and. Luggage is also the appropriate noun for bags and personal belongings.

× For every journey, I love sitting by the window side

✓ On every journey, I love sitting by the window

Use on with journey when referring to something that happens during each trip. The natural expression is by the window, not by the window side.

× It gives me that nostalgic feeling, a feeling of freedom to just feel the wind taking air

✓ It gives me a nostalgic feeling and a sense of freedom as I feel the wind on my face

The original has an awkward and incomplete structure after feeling. Use as to introduce the simultaneous action, and use feel the wind on my face as the natural expression.

× Stay sitting by the window side

✓ I enjoy sitting by the window

The original is an unnecessary imperative and does not clearly connect to the speaker's previous statement. Use a complete first-person sentence to explain the preference.

× I was not much of A an outdoor person

✓ I was not much of an outdoor person

The phrase requires the article an before the vowel sound in outdoor. Only one article should be used; A is incorrect and should be removed.

× For one long journey I remember we took when I was a kid was a relative wedding

✓ The one long journey I remember taking as a child was to a relative's wedding

The original has an incomplete and incorrectly ordered relative clause. The natural structure is the journey I remember taking, and the possessive form relative's is needed to show that the wedding belonged to the relative.

× The IT was I think about a three hours journey

✓ It was, I think, about a three-hour journey

When a number and a noun combine before another noun as a compound adjective, the unit noun remains singular: three-hour journey, not three-hours journey. The unnecessary words The and IT should also be reduced to the pronoun It.

× The wind was so relaxing

✓ The wind was so refreshing

Relaxing usually describes an activity or experience that makes someone feel calm. Refreshing is more suitable for a cool or pleasant wind. Alternatively, you could say the sound of the wind was relaxing.