Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答结构清晰，先直接表达偏好，再给出原因和具体例子，内容也比较自然。需要注意句子连接：最后一句出现逗号拼接错误，应该拆成两个句子或使用连接词；此外，"picturesque"、"beautiful"、"amazing"和"fascinating"连续使用略显重复，可以适当精简。建议使用更自然的表达，如“take photos of the scenery”和“the view was breathtaking”。

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I usually choose a window seat because I enjoy taking photos and admiring the scenery outside. For instance, when I flew to Tokyo last month, I had a great view of Mount Fuji, which was absolutely breathtaking.

Sugestão: 回答直接，并且通过过去和现在的对比以及未来计划丰富了内容。不过有几处搭配和语法需要改进：应将“paid all attention on my studies”改为“devoted all my attention to my studies”；“busy with their jobs”更自然的表达是“busy with work”；“Although it happened that way”不够地道，可以改为“Although we did not travel much back then”；最后应说“during the Christmas holiday”或“at Christmas”，而不是“in Christmas holiday”。

Exemplo: No, we didn’t. When I was young, I devoted most of my time to my studies, while my parents were busy with work. Although we did not travel much back then, we now have more time to make memories together. In fact, we are planning a trip to Japan during the Christmas holiday.

× For example, last month I flew to Tokyo and I sat by the window to see the beautiful scenery of Mount Fuji, it was amazing and fascinating.

✓ For example, last month I flew to Tokyo and sat by the window to see the beautiful scenery of Mount Fuji. It was amazing and fascinating.

原句用逗号连接两个可以独立成句的完整句子，形成逗号拼接错误。应使用句号将它们分开。注意，前一个句子中主语都是“I”，第二个动词前可以省略重复的“I”。

× When I was young, I paid all attention on my studies while my parents were busy with their jobs.

✓ When I was young, I paid all my attention to my studies while my parents were busy with their jobs.

固定搭配是“pay attention to something”，不能说“pay attention on something”。因此应将“on”改为“to”。“all my attention”比“all attention”更自然，表示“我全部的注意力”。建议记忆搭配：“pay attention to + 名词”。

× In fact, we plan to have our vacation to Japan in Christmas holiday.

✓ In fact, we plan to have our vacation to Japan during the Christmas holiday.

表示“在圣诞假期期间”时，应使用“during”，而不是“in”。“during + 一段时间”表示“在……期间”。例如：“We travelled during the summer holiday.”

× In fact, we plan to have our vacation to Japan in Christmas holiday.

✓ In fact, we plan to have our vacation to Japan during the Christmas holiday.

这里的“Christmas holiday”指特定的圣诞假期，通常需要定冠词“the”，所以应说“the Christmas holiday”。同时，“during”比“in”更适合表示假期这一时间段。