Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly in the first sentence: “Yes, I do.” Then give two clear reasons, such as taking photos and enjoying the scenery. Avoid repeated fillers like “uh,” unclear phrases such as “get the clicker” and “get over the route,” and irrelevant or incorrect expressions such as “summer memorable.” Use linking words such as “because” and “also,” and keep the answer to two or three complete sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I prefer sitting by the window because I can take photos of the scenery and enjoy the views along the way. It also makes the journey more memorable, especially when I am travelling through beautiful places.

Sugestão: Use the past tense consistently because the question asks about childhood: say “When I was in seventh grade, we went…” rather than “we go.” Use natural collocations such as “went on a trip to Amritsar by car” and “made me feel happy.” Organise the answer with a direct opening, a reason, and specific details about the journey. Replace unclear phrases like “summer happiness,” “some confident,” and “it fills me a happy” with precise expressions such as “happy memories,” “more confident about travelling,” and “I enjoyed spending time with my family.”

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was in seventh grade, my family and I went on a long trip to Amritsar by car. It was memorable because it was my first long journey with them, and visiting the Golden Temple made me feel happy and more confident about travelling.

× From my perspective, I like to sit by the window because, uh, by sitting on the window side, uh, we can, can get the clicker, the pictures about their trip and it can make the summer memorable to that.

✓ From my perspective, I like to sit by the window because we can take pictures of our trip, and it can make the summer memorable for us.

The pronouns their and that do not agree with the speaker's intended meaning. Since the speaker is talking about the speaker and the family or travel group, our and us are more appropriate.

× From my perspective, I like to sit by the window because, uh, by sitting on the window side, uh, we can, can get the clicker, the pictures about their trip and it can make the summer memorable to that.

✓ From my perspective, I like to sit by the window because, by sitting near the window, we can take pictures of our trip, and it can make the summer memorable for us.

The prepositions on and to are incorrect in these expressions. Use near or by the window and memorable for us. Also, take pictures of something is the correct prepositional pattern.

× And we can also see the beautiful views and, uh, summer adventures and get over the route, uh, know about the.

✓ We can also see beautiful views, enjoy the scenery, and learn more about the route.

The original sentence has an incomplete ending and unclear coordination. Each item in the list should use a complete and parallel verb phrase: see, enjoy, and learn.

× When I was in my 7th grade, we go to the trip to Amritsar on the car.

✓ When I was in seventh grade, we went on a trip to Amritsar by car.

We normally say in seventh grade, not in my 7th grade. The expression is go on a trip, not go to the trip, and the usual expression for transport is by car.

× When I was in my 7th grade, we go to the trip to Amritsar on the car.

✓ When I was in seventh grade, we went on a trip to Amritsar by car.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so the answer must use the past tense. The past form of go is went.

× It was a memorable trip to me because it was my first long trip with my family and it builds me a summer happiness and some confident about the travels and it fills me a happy by seeing.

✓ It was a memorable trip for me because it was my first long trip with my family. It brought me lasting happiness and gave me confidence about travelling, and seeing new places made me happy.

The answer describes a completed trip in the past, so present-tense verbs such as builds and fills should be changed to past-tense verbs such as brought, gave, and made.

× It was a memorable trip to me because it was my first long trip with my family and it builds me a summer happiness and some confident about the travels and it fills me a happy by seeing.

✓ It was a memorable trip for me because it was my first long trip with my family. It brought me lasting happiness and gave me confidence about travelling, and seeing new places made me happy.

Confident is an adjective, but the sentence needs the noun confidence after gave me some. After made me, use the adjective happy directly. Happiness is a noun and should not be used with the structure made me a happy.