Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 자연스럽고 의사 전달은 되지만 몇 가지 오류와 어색한 어휘 사용이 있습니다. 우선 시제와 동사의 형태를 고쳐야 합니다 (예: 'I enjoy' 또는 'I enjoyed' 중 하나로 일관). 'motion stickiness'와 'stitchy'는 잘못된 표현이므로 'motion sickness'와 같은 정확한 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 응답은 간결하게 유지하고 한두 개의 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 논리적으로 만들면 좋습니다. 마지막 문장 'until now'는 불필요하므로 제거하세요. 문장 수는 3문장 안팎으로 유지하고, 연결어로 흐름을 개선하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer sitting by the window when travelling because I enjoy watching the scenery, which makes the journey more relaxing. Also, I sometimes suffer from motion sickness, so being able to see the horizon helps me feel better. For these reasons, I usually try to book a window seat.

Sugestão: 내용은 좋고 감정이 잘 드러나지만 문법적 연결과 구두점, 시제 일관성이 필요합니다. 현재 답변은 문장이 길게 이어져 쉼표나 접속사가 부족합니다. 예를 들어 'because my dad was passionate about fishing and wanted to teach me'처럼 동사의 형태를 맞추고, 'we spent'로 과거 시제를 사용하세요. 또한 구체적인 디테일(어디로 갔는지, 어떤 활동을 했는지)을 한두 가지 더 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다. 응답은 3문장 이내로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was in elementary school, my family took a ten-day trip to a lakeside town because my dad loved fishing and wanted to teach me. During the trip, we went out on a small boat every morning and I learned how to cast and clean fish, so it remains one of my best childhood memories.

× I prefer sitting by window because I enjoyed watching the scenery which makes the journey more relaxing.

✓ I prefer sitting by the window because I enjoy watching the scenery, which makes the journey more relaxing.

The verb forms and tense must be consistent. Use 'prefer' + gerund is correct, but the noun phrase needs the definite article 'the window'. 'Enjoyed' (past) conflicts with 'prefer' (present); change to present 'enjoy' to match habitual preference. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which makes...'. Suggestion: Use consistent present tense for habitual actions and include articles before singular nouns.

× I also sometimes get motion stickiness so being able to see the horizon helps me feel less stitchy.

✓ I also sometimes get motion sickness, so being able to see the horizon helps me feel less sick.

Incorrect word choice: 'motion stickiness' and 'stitchy' are not standard English. Use the noun 'motion sickness' for the condition and the adjective 'sick' to describe how you feel. Include a comma before 'so' linking two independent clauses. Suggestion: Use established medical/condition terms and correct adjectives.

× That's why I prefer sitting by window until now.

✓ That's why I have preferred sitting by the window until now.

The original mixes present preference 'prefer' with the time expression 'until now', which requires present perfect 'have preferred' to indicate a state continuing up to the present. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'window'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions or states that started in the past and continue to the present, and include articles for specific nouns.

× When I was in elementary school, I went on a ten day trip with my family because my dad was passionate about fishing and wanting to teach me I learned how to fish and we spend many happy days together.

✓ When I was in elementary school, I went on a ten-day trip with my family because my dad was passionate about fishing and wanted to teach me. I learned how to fish and we spent many happy days together.

Several tense and form errors: use 'wanted' (past) to match 'went' and 'was'; 'wanting to teach me' should be 'wanted to teach me' to form a clear past sequence. 'Ten day' should be hyphenated 'ten-day' as a compound adjective. Also split into two sentences for clarity and change 'spend' (present) to past 'spent'. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same past timeframe for past narratives, hyphenate compound adjectives, and break long sentences for clarity.

× So it was one of my best childhood memories.

✓ So, it was one of my best childhood memories.

Minor punctuation: add a comma after 'So' when used to introduce a concluding statement. The sentence is otherwise grammatical. Suggestion: Use a comma after introductory adverbs like 'So' for natural rhythm and clarity.