Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and expand briefly with a specific reason or example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because / so). Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Also avoid redundancy like 'yes, of course' followed immediately by qualifications — combine them smoothly.

Exemplo: I usually prefer to sit by the window because I enjoy the view and find it relaxing. However, when I travel with my mother or younger brothers, I often give them the window seat so they can be comfortable. For example, last month I let my brother sit by the window during a three-hour bus trip.

Sugestão: Provide a clearer topic sentence and add a specific detail or short anecdote to make your answer more vivid. Use linking words such as 'because', 'so', or 'for example' to connect ideas. Keep responses concise and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

Exemplo: Yes, I had many long journeys with my family because we lived far from our relatives. So every summer holiday we would travel back and forth, often by car for several hours. For instance, I remember a seven-hour drive we took when I was ten to visit my grandparents, which felt like an adventure.

× Yes, of course, but sometimes I travel with my mother or my younger brothers. That's why I leave the seat for them.

✓ Yes, of course, but sometimes I travel with my mother or my younger brother. That's why I give the seat to them.

Original sentence uses 'my younger brothers' which suggests multiple brothers but context implies possibly one; however the main issue is pronoun and verb choice: 'leave the seat for them' is awkward when referring to offering a seat; use 'give the seat to them' or 'offer them my seat'. Also if there is only one brother, use singular 'my younger brother'. Ensure pronoun agreement: 'them' is acceptable for plural; if singular, use 'him'. Suggestion: confirm number of brothers and match noun and pronoun accordingly, and use a more natural verb like 'give' or 'offer'.

× Yes, many times, because we live in an area that's far away from our other families. That's why every summer holiday we go back and forth.

✓ Yes, many times, because we live in an area that's far from our other family members. That's why every summer holiday we go back and forth.

The phrase 'far away from' is not incorrect but 'far from' is more natural with 'live'. Also 'our other families' is awkward; use 'our other family members' or 'our extended family'. 'Families' suggests multiple nuclear families; 'family members' is clearer. Keep tense and meaning same. Suggestion: replace 'far away from our other families' with 'far from our other family members'.