Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid filler words (uh, like) and incorrect verb forms. For example, say why the scenery soothes you and give a brief specific instance.

Exemplo: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery relaxes me. For instance, watching trees and fields pass by slows my thoughts and helps me unwind after a busy day.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer, then explain with one concrete reason. Use linking words such as ‘but’ or ‘because’ correctly and avoid repetition. Fix grammar: use ‘with my eyes’ and correct verb forms.

Exemplo: I sometimes take photos of the scenery, but not always because I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes. For example, when the light is beautiful I might take a picture, but often I just watch and remember the scene.

Sugestão: Answer directly then provide specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases like ‘lower life’ with clearer expressions (e.g. ‘a slower pace of life’). Limit to two supporting sentences and use appropriate vocabulary (relaxing, peaceful).

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I love the greenery and quiet. The fresh air and peaceful trails give me a slower pace of life, which is a nice change from the busy city.

× Absolutely yes, because I think it's give me feel like very soothing and like, uh, it's give me like more slowly life and so relax when I'm doing that.

✓ Absolutely yes, because I think it makes me feel very soothed, and it makes my life feel slower and more relaxed when I do that.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement and verb form (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 9) — 'it's give' is incorrect; use 'it makes' for third person singular. Incorrect use of verb in past participle/present participle forms (use 'feel' vs 'feelings') (IDs 9 and 10). Word choice and adverb/adjective use (Grammar Problem Type ID 13) — 'very soothing' should be 'very soothed' or 'soothing' with correct structure; 'more slowly life' is ungrammatical; use 'life feel slower'. Suggestion: use 'it makes me feel very soothed' or 'it feels very soothing' and restructure the second clause to 'it makes my life feel slower and more relaxed'.

× I think I usually do that, but not not always because I like to watch them by my eyes like like a like real eyes or something like that because it's give me like more.

✓ I usually do that, but not always, because I like to watch the view with my own eyes, not through photos, because it gives me more (enjoyment/feeling).

Errors include redundancy and incorrect negation (Grammar Problem Type ID 26), incorrect pronoun/reflexive use (ID 12) — use 'my own eyes', subject-verb agreement and verb form (ID 2 and 9) — 'it's give' should be 'it gives'. Vague ending 'more' needs an object. Suggestion: remove repeated words, use 'my own eyes', correct verb to 'gives', and specify what 'more' refers to (e.g., 'more enjoyment').

× I prefer to go to mountains because I love the green.

✓ I prefer going to the mountains because I love the greenery.

Errors: verb form and preposition (Grammar Problem Type ID 8 and 11) — 'prefer to go to mountains' should be 'prefer going to the mountains' or 'prefer to go to the mountains' and include the article 'the' for specific geographical plural (Grammar Problem Type ID 22/17). Noun usage (ID 13) — 'the green' is unnatural; use 'greenery' or 'the color green'. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'mountains' and use 'greenery' for natural color/vegetation.

× I love the color that give me like feel relaxing and soothing.

✓ I love the color because it makes me feel relaxed and soothed.

Errors: subject-verb agreement (Grammar Problem Type ID 2) — 'that give me' should be 'that gives me' or rephrase 'because it makes me'. Incorrect adjective/adverb use (ID 13) — 'feel relaxing' is wrong; use 'feel relaxed' or 'feel relaxed and soothed'. Suggestion: use 'it makes me feel relaxed and soothed' for correct causative structure and adjective forms.

× It's give me this lower life that I don't have in the con in the city.

✓ It gives me a slower-paced life that I don't have in the city.

Errors: subject-verb agreement (Grammar Problem Type ID 2) — 'It's give' should be 'It gives'. Word choice and collocation (ID 13) — 'lower life' is unnatural; use 'slower-paced life'. Redundant/mistyped words 'con' removed. Article use (ID 22) — use 'the city' or 'the city life'. Suggestion: say 'a slower-paced life that I don't have in the city'.