Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, eliminate fillers (umm), correct unclear phrases (e.g. "Century 1", "look up the sensory"), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep length under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing new places. For example, when I ride between towns I like to watch rural landscapes and small villages pass by, which helps me relax.

Sugestão: Remove hesitations and complete your idea. Give a clear reason and a specific example of what you photograph, using a linking word to connect sentences. Avoid unfinished sentences and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside the window because I want to preserve special moments. For instance, I usually photograph colorful sunsets or mountain views so I can look back at them later.

Sugestão: Answer directly and concisely. State your preference (or lack of it) clearly, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words, removing fillers and repetitions.

Exemplo: I don't have a strong preference because I like both the mountains and the sea. For example, I enjoy hiking in the mountains for the fresh air and views, and I also like going to the sea to watch sunsets and listen to the waves.

× Yes, I do look out the window at the Century 1 travelling by bus or car because I really love umm to look up the sensory and I love nature and I love to look at the different place that I have never seen in my life and umm I really enjoy traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I really love to look at the scenery; I love nature and seeing places I have never seen before, and I really enjoy travelling by bus or car.

The sentence uses redundant and awkward present continuous forms and incorrect verb phrases. 'Do look' is unnecessary in a habitual context; use simple present 'I look'. 'Travelling' should be 'when I travel' to show the habitual action. 'Look up the sensory' is incorrect word choice; the correct phrase is 'look at the scenery'. 'Different place' needs plural or 'places' and a clearer relative clause: 'places I have never seen before'. Also remove unnecessary filler words and repetition. Suggestion: use simple present for habits, choose correct nouns ('scenery', 'places'), and avoid redundant phrases.

× Yes, I do often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because, umm, I love to capture a beautiful moment in my uh, memories or in my phone because memories fade away. You know only the photos that we.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love to capture beautiful moments on my phone; memories fade away, and only photos remain.

The original has awkward placement of 'do often' — use 'often take' for frequency. 'Capture a beautiful moment in my memories or in my phone' mixes metaphors; use 'capture beautiful moments on my phone'. The fragment 'You know only the photos that we.' is incomplete; complete the idea: 'only photos remain.' Also prefer plural 'moments' when speaking generally. Suggestion: place adverbs before main verbs ('often take'), use correct preposition for storing photos ('on my phone'), and finish sentences to avoid fragments.

× I don't really have preference between the mountains or the sea because both of them are my favorites.

✓ I don't really have a preference between the mountains and the sea because they are both my favourites.

Missing article 'a' before 'preference' and incorrect use of 'or' — when comparing two options use 'between ... and ...'. Also 'both of them are my favorites' is wordy; 'they are both my favourites' is natural. Suggestion: include articles where required ('a preference'), and use 'between ... and ...' for two items.

× Umm, I, I love to go hiking and I also love to go to the sea and watch the sunset and then touch, uh, listen to the waves of the sea.

✓ I love hiking, and I also enjoy going to the sea to watch the sunset and listen to the waves.

Use of 'to go hiking' is acceptable but can be more natural as 'I love hiking'. 'Go to the sea and watch the sunset and then touch, uh, listen to the waves' contains unnecessary 'touch' and filler; 'listen to the waves' is correct, but 'touch the waves' is odd. Simplify the sequence: 'going to the sea to watch the sunset and listen to the waves.' Suggestion: prefer gerunds for activities ('hiking'), remove fillers, and keep verbs parallel and meaningful.