Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and repeat words; give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on fluency and concise phrasing (no more than 4–5 sentences). For example, begin with a direct answer, add a reason, then a brief example. Pronunciation: avoid repeating words like “see the see” and unclear words such as “attain attentional.”

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the countryside. For example, I like noticing changing landscapes and small villages, which helps me relax. Therefore, I often spend the journey observing nature and taking mental photos.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and improve grammatical accuracy. Give one clear reason and a brief example, using linking words like “because” or “so.” Correct collocations (e.g., “take pictures of the scenery,” “save them in my photo gallery,” not “save in my picture”). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take pictures of the scenery outside because there are many beautiful views worth remembering. I usually save these photos in my gallery and share the best ones with friends after the trip.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly (choose one preference) and give clear reasons and a short example. Avoid saying both without clear preference. Use linking words like “because” or “however,” and correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer the mountains because…”). Keep it concise and specific about what you like.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because their fresh air and quiet trails help me relax. For instance, I enjoy hiking at sunrise and taking landscape photos to share with friends.

× Yes, I usually umm, see the see outside the window when I umm, I travel with a bus, by a bus or by a car because umm uh, when I go on travel, I always see the natural beauties and I always attain attentional to what the outside. So so I always do watch outside so see the nature.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or by car because when I go on a trip I always see natural beauty and pay attention to what is outside. So I always look outside to see nature.

This sentence contains multiple article errors and awkward phrasing. 'See the see' is incorrect and should be 'look out of the window' (verb + preposition). 'Travel with a bus' is wrong; use 'travel by bus' (correct preposition for transport). 'A travel' should be 'a trip' or 'travel' (uncountable). 'The natural beauties' is unnatural in English; use 'natural beauty' (uncountable). 'Attain attentional' is incorrect; correct expression is 'pay attention'. Also remove redundant filler words. Suggestion: use natural collocations (look out of the window, travel by bus/car, go on a trip, pay attention).

× Yes I usually take pictures of outside the car because it has many natural beauty so I can save in my picture and I can take pictures and save in my photo gallery. So it is AI think it is a cultural part that I can take picture through a travel.

✓ Yes, I usually take pictures outside the car because there is a lot of natural beauty, so I can save them in my photo gallery. I think it is part of the culture to take photos while traveling.

Preposition and article mistakes: 'take pictures of outside the car' should be 'take pictures outside the car' or 'of the scenery outside the car'. 'It has many natural beauty' is wrong: use 'there is a lot of natural beauty' or 'there are many beautiful places'. 'Save in my picture' should be 'save them in my photo gallery' (correct object and preposition). 'Through a travel' is incorrect; use 'while traveling' or 'while traveling'/'when traveling'. Also replace 'AI think' with 'I think'.

× Yes, I usually prepare first the mountains and the same and I always enjoy to continuously watching the sea and mountains and taking pictures of it because it's really mere relaxation and and I can take pictures and share with my friends because taking picture is very crucial when.

✓ I usually prefer the mountains and the sea, and I always enjoy continuously watching them and taking pictures because it is really relaxing. I can take pictures and share them with my friends because taking photos is important.

Tense and verb form issues and word choice: 'prepare first the mountains and the same' is incorrect; likely meant 'prefer the mountains and the sea'. 'Enjoy to continuously watching' should be 'enjoy continuously watching' (verb + -ing after enjoy). 'Taking pictures of it' should match plural 'them' for sea and mountains. 'It's really mere relaxation' should be 'it is really relaxing'. 'Taking picture is very crucial when' is incomplete; change to 'taking photos is important'. Suggestions: use correct verbs (prefer, enjoy + -ing), match pronouns to plural subjects, and complete clauses.