Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like “urbanized regions” and “countless”, and correct grammar (singular/plural agreement and article usage).

Exemplo: Yes. I live in a city, so there are many tall apartment blocks near my home. For example, there is a 20‑storey building across the street that I can see from my window.

Sugestão: Good clear idea and coherence, but make it more concise and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition (‘basically’, ‘I mean’) and improve sentence flow. Provide one specific example to strengthen the response.

Exemplo: Not really. Because buildings are common where I live, I prefer photographing natural scenery; for instance, I often take photos of sunsets over the river nearby.

Sugestão: Strong response: direct, relevant details and good vocabulary. To improve further, add a brief personal reason or emotion to make it more natural and concise (one linking word to connect ideas).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic landmark with great history. Moreover, I’d love to go to the top at night to enjoy the sparkling lights and the panoramic city view.

Sugestão: Very good: clear topic sentence, vivid details and appropriate vocabulary. To be even more effective, shorten slightly and use one linking phrase to tie reason and example together. You could also mention a potential downside briefly for balance.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to live in a high‑rise apartment because it offers a bird’s‑eye view of the city; for example, at night I could watch the neon lights and busy streets below, which feels exciting though it might be a bit noisy.

× Yes, because I live in urbanized regions so there are countless high buildings here.

✓ Yes, because I live in an urbanized area, there are countless tall buildings here.

Use 'an' for the singular countable noun 'area' (article error) and 'urbanized area' is more natural than 'urbanized regions' in this context. Also use 'tall buildings' rather than 'high buildings' (adjective collocation). Add a comma before 'so' to improve sentence flow.

× Not really because I think I see them too often so I don't feel like they are unique to me.

✓ Not really, because I see them too often, so I don't feel they are unique to me.

Place commas to separate clauses. Remove 'I think' which is redundant and interrupts flow. 'I don't feel they are unique to me' is more natural than 'I don't feel like they are unique to me.' The original had adverb placement and style issues.

× Basically I capture photos of good scenery.

✓ Basically, I take photos of beautiful scenery.

Use 'take photos' not 'capture photos' for natural collocation. 'Beautiful scenery' is more idiomatic than 'good scenery.' Add a comma after 'Basically.' This fixes article/word choice issues.

× Natural scenery I mean, such as mountains or rivers or sunsets.

✓ I mean natural scenery, such as mountains, rivers, or sunsets.

Reorder to 'I mean natural scenery' for clarity and add commas between list items. No article is needed before plural nouns like 'mountains' or 'rivers.' Improves sentence structure.

× It's an iconic landmark with incredible historical value.

✓ It's an iconic landmark with incredible historical value.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Present participle issue not applicable. Included for completeness.

× I would love to stand at the top of the building to enjoy the panoramic view of the city, especially at night when it lights up.

✓ I would love to stand at the top of the tower to enjoy the panoramic view of the city, especially at night when it lights up.

'Top of the tower' is more natural than 'top of the building' when referring to the Eiffel Tower. Sentence structure and verb forms are correct.

× I would love to live in a high rise apartment because it offers an incredible bird's eye view of the city.

✓ I would love to live in a high-rise apartment because it offers an incredible bird's-eye view of the city.

Hyphenate 'high-rise' and 'bird's-eye' when used as compound adjectives before a noun. 'A high-rise apartment' requires the article 'a.' This fixes punctuation and compound adjective usage.

× There's something mesmerizing about overlooking the bustling traffic, the moving vehicles, and the vibrant neon lights at night.

✓ There's something mesmerizing about overlooking the bustling traffic, the moving vehicles, and the vibrant neon lights at night.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Article usage is acceptable.

× It really makes you feel connected to the urban energy.

✓ It really makes you feel connected to the urban energy.

Sentence is correct as written; no grammatical change necessary.