Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word choice, and add one specific detail. Use a linking word if giving an additional point.

Exemplo: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because my hometown is an urban area. For example, there are several office towers and shopping centers close by, so I often see them when I go out.

Sugestão: Clarify vocabulary and correct mistakes. Begin with a direct statement about taking photos, explain the reason with correct role/tenses, and give one specific example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I am studying architecture. I photograph facades and structural details to study how they are built, for example the steel framework of a modern office block.

Sugestão: Make a clear, specific answer. Name the building, give one reason why you want to visit and one detail about its structure or attraction. Avoid hesitations and finish the sentence coherently.

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to visit the teamLab Borderless museum in Tokyo because it is famous for its immersive architecture. I am curious about how the building’s open spaces and lighting create interactive exhibits.

Sugestão: Respond directly and give two clear, coherent reasons. Fix pronoun and word errors, avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect reasons.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I would feel unsafe in case of an emergency and I would find it difficult to go outside quickly. Also, I prefer ground-level houses with easy access to the street.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings in my home because my hometown is urban earlier, so I often watch the high buildings such as company restaurants or some shops.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because my hometown used to be urban, so I often see tall buildings such as company offices, restaurants, and shops.

The sentence misuses the article 'in' with 'home' and has unclear time expression 'urban earlier'. Use 'near my home' for location. Use 'used to be' to indicate past state. 'Watch' is incorrect verb for seeing buildings; use 'see'. 'High buildings' is unnatural; use 'tall buildings'. Also list items with correct nouns and articles. Suggestion: say 'near my home', 'my hometown used to be urban', 'I often see tall buildings such as company offices, restaurants, and shops.'

× Yeah, I often take water because I I'm actually studying the architect, so I want to learn about the structure of the building.

✓ Yes, I often take photos because I'm actually studying architecture, so I want to learn about building structures.

Mistakes: 'take water' is wrong collocation; the correct phrase is 'take photos'. 'I I'm' is a repetition; remove duplication. 'Studying the architect' is incorrect — say 'studying architecture' or 'studying to be an architect'. 'Structure of the building' can be pluralized to 'building structures' or 'the structure of buildings' to match general intent. Suggestion: use 'take photos', 'I'm studying architecture', and 'learn about building structures.'

× So I have to go to the high tall building place and take picture.

✓ So I have to go to tall buildings and take pictures.

Problems: 'go to the high tall building place' is redundant and uses incorrect prepositions/articles. Use 'go to tall buildings' or 'go to a tall building'. 'Take picture' lacks plural and article; use 'take pictures' or 'take a picture'. Suggestion: simplify to 'go to tall buildings and take pictures.'

× Yes, there are actually I would like to go to the amusement.

✓ Yes, actually I would like to go to an amusement park.

Sentence is ungrammatical and missing nouns. 'Go to the amusement' is incomplete; the correct collocation is 'go to an amusement park'. Also remove redundant 'there are'. Suggestion: say 'Actually, I would like to go to an amusement park.'

× It is a name, an amusement building.

✓ It is called an amusement building.

The phrase 'It is a name' is incorrect; use 'It is called' to report a name. 'An amusement building' may be acceptable but 'amusement park' is more natural. Also article usage 'an' before vowel sound is correct here but overall phrasing is wrong. Suggestion: say 'It is called an amusement building' or better 'It is an amusement park.'

× It is a famous company in Japan, so and the the structure of the building is very.

✓ It is a famous company in Japan, and the building's structure is very interesting.

Sentence contains fragments and repetition ('so and the the'). 'Very' must be followed by an adjective; 'very' alone is incomplete. Added 'interesting' to complete thought and changed 'the structure of the building' to 'the building's structure' for naturalness. Suggestion: 'It is a famous company in Japan, and the building's structure is very interesting.'

× No, I don't want to leave because when I ask what happened, I can, I can, I can't.

✓ No, I don't want to live there because when I ask what happened, I can't.

The student likely meant 'live there' but wrote 'leave' (wrong word choice). The clause 'I can, I can, I can't' is mixed and redundant; simplify to 'I can't'. Also maintain third person/verb forms consistent: 'I don't want to live there.' Suggestion: replace 'leave' with 'live there' and remove repetition: 'I can't.'

× It is difficult for me to go out to the building and it will be dangerous because of the high.

✓ It is difficult for me to go out from a tall building and it would be dangerous because of the height.

Problems: 'go out to the building' is wrong preposition; use 'go out from a tall building' or 'leave the building'. 'Because of the high' is ungrammatical; use 'because of the height' or 'because it is very high'. Also use conditional 'would be dangerous' to express potential danger. Suggestion: 'It is difficult for me to leave a tall building, and it would be dangerous because of the height.'

× So that's why I don't want to live in there.

✓ So that's why I don't want to live there.

The preposition 'in' before 'there' is unnecessary and ungrammatical in this context. Remove 'in' to make 'live there'. Subject-verb agreement is fine, but phrase needs correction. Suggestion: 'So that's why I don't want to live there.'