Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; remove fillers (uh), use clear topic sentence, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Focus on sentence limits and correct plural forms.

Exemplo: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, the apartment tower on Main Street has an ornate entrance and large glass windows, so it looks very impressive. Additionally, the buildings have modern security systems, which makes residents feel safe.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and long clauses; correct grammar (plural forms, remove unnecessary 'if' after 'in case'); use linking words such as 'however' or 'but' for contrast and give a specific example of a building you would photograph.

Exemplo: I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not an experienced photographer. However, if a building has a unique design—such as a historic cathedral with intricate stonework—I will photograph it so I can remember the details.

Sugestão: Use accurate grammar (article 'an' before vowel sounds), avoid fillers, and be more specific about the building (name or clearer description). Use linking words to connect reasons and include one concrete detail about the interior or exterior.

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to visit a building in London that I saw online; it has an eggshell-like facade that curves elegantly. Moreover, a friend said the interior features open, light-filled spaces, which makes me eager to see it in person.

Sugestão: Remove fillers, correct plurality and word order, and make a concise topic sentence followed by one clear reason. Use a linking word (for example, therefore) and give a specific example of the view or feeling.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers panoramic views of the city. For example, from a high-floor apartment I could see the river and parks below, which would make me feel relaxed and connected to the city.

× Yes, there are several tall buildings nearby my home uh, they are beautiful in structure and they are breathtaking uh views it's really interesting when I visit those building because their entrance is uh beautifully decorated.

✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home; they are beautiful in structure and offer breathtaking views. It's really interesting when I visit those buildings because their entrances are beautifully decorated.

Incorrect singular/plural forms: 'nearby my home' is unidiomatic (use 'near my home'), 'breathtaking uh views' should be 'breathtaking views', 'those building' should be plural 'those buildings', and 'their entrance' should be plural 'their entrances' to match 'buildings'. Also 'beautifully decorated' modifies plural 'entrances'. Improve by matching noun plurality with verbs and possessives and using natural prepositional phrase 'near my home'. Suggestion: check each noun and its modifiers to ensure singular/plural agreement and use standard prepositions.

× Even the security system is really good in there, so you feel really secure uh I.

✓ Even the security system is really good there, so you feel really secure.

Unnecessary preposition 'in' after 'good' is incorrect here; say 'good there'. The trailing 'I' is incomplete and should be removed. Use concise clause structure: 'the security system is really good there'.

× Honestly speaking, I do not take photos of building because I'm not a good photographer, but in case if I visit the building which is really unique in nature or, uh, it's really a nice or has some different structure, I definitely try to take photos of those because I do not know when I'll go and visit that building again.

✓ Honestly speaking, I do not take photos of buildings because I'm not a good photographer, but if I visit a building that is really unique or has a different structure, I will definitely try to take photos of it because I do not know when I will visit that building again.

Plural and article errors: 'photos of building' should be 'photos of buildings' or 'a building' depending on context. 'in case if' is redundant—use 'if'. Use 'a building that is' rather than 'the building which is'. Match singular 'a building' with singular pronouns 'it' and 'that building'. Use future 'will' for likely future action.

× So, uh, I try to take the photos of those building.

✓ So, I try to take photos of those buildings.

Plural mismatch: 'those building' should be 'those buildings'. Also omit unnecessary article 'the' before 'photos' when speaking generally: 'take photos of'.

× I have seen one building which is in London and the structure is so beautiful.

✓ I have seen a building in London, and its structure is so beautiful.

Use 'a building' instead of 'one building' for natural phrasing, and use possessive 'its structure' rather than 'the structure' to refer to that building. Also simplify 'which is in London' to 'in London'.

× Uh, it has a egg shell structure.

✓ It has an eggshell structure.

Article error: use 'an' before vowel sound 'eggshell'. Also 'eggshell' is one word.

× I really love that and I have, uh, decided if I get an opportunity to visit that building, I will surely take that opportunity.

✓ I really love it, and I have decided that if I get an opportunity to visit that building, I will surely take it.

Pronoun and article clarity: use 'it' to refer to the building. Add 'that' to introduce the conditional clause: 'decided that if...'. Use concise pronoun 'take it' for the opportunity.

× Uh, even, uh, one of my friend was telling that building has a really nice interior and the inside.

✓ Even one of my friends was saying that the building has a really nice interior.

Plural: 'one of my friend' should be 'one of my friends'. Use 'was saying' or 'told me' for reporting. Remove redundant 'and the inside' since 'interior' already means inside.

× Yes, I would love to uh, stay in a tall buildings because I feel the view from uh, buildings are really awesome.

✓ Yes, I would love to stay in a tall building because I feel the view from such buildings is really awesome.

Mismatch: 'a tall buildings' should be singular 'a tall building'. Then 'the view from buildings are' has subject-verb agreement error; use 'is' for 'the view' or rephrase to 'views from such buildings are'. Here corrected to 'the view from such buildings is' to keep meaning.

× Uh, you can have a panoramic view of surroundings if there are no obstacles in front of the buildings.

✓ You can have a panoramic view of the surroundings if there are no obstacles in front of the building.

Article and agreement: add 'the' before 'surroundings'. If referring to a single tall building, use singular 'the building' to match earlier sentence; if plural, adjust consistently. Ensure noun phrases match context.

× Also, I feel uh, different when I'm staying in a high Storey rise building uh.

✓ Also, I feel different when I'm staying in a high-storey building.

Form and word order: 'Storey rise' is incorrect; use 'high-storey' or 'high-rise'. Recommended: 'high-rise building'. Remove filler 'uh' and capitalize properly. Maintain adjective order 'high-rise building'.