Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct countable nouns and prepositions, remove filler words, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also keep it under 3–4 short sentences.

Exemplo: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small town. There are only two- or three-storey houses, so the area is quiet and not crowded. I enjoy living there because it feels peaceful and safe.

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural by correcting word choice and tightening the structure. Use one linking word to explain why and give a specific example of a building or style you photograph.

Exemplo: Yes, I love photographing modern buildings because I appreciate their design and structure. For example, I often take pictures of glass-fronted office blocks and post the best shots on social media to remember the places I’ve visited.

Sugestão: Correct factual errors and improve clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the building and its location, avoid repetition, fix tense and preposition errors, and add one specific reason and example using a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I have wanted to go for years because it is an iconic landmark, and for example I’ve seen it many times in films and travel documentaries, which makes me eager to see it in person.

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar and collocations. Start with a clear statement, use linking words to add a specific reason, correct phrases (e.g. “city is lit up”), and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views from the top floor are pleasant. For example, at night the whole city is lit up, which I find very relaxing.

× No, there are not any tall building near to my home because I live in a small town and uh, there are only two or three right Storey houses.

✓ No, there are not any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small town and, uh, there are only two- or three-story houses.

Use plural 'buildings' after 'any' (singular/plural issue). Also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'near' and correct 'right Storey' to 'two- or three-story'. Hyphenate 'two- or three-story' for clarity. Improve punctuation.

× I like to live there because of these area are quite and also less crowded.

✓ I like living there because the area is quiet and less crowded.

The original mixes structures incorrectly. Use 'living' or 'like to live' consistently; here 'I like living there' is natural. 'These area are' is wrong: use singular 'the area is'. 'Quite' (adverb) should modify 'quiet' (adjective). This fixes adjective/adverb misuse and subject-verb agreement (also relates to sentence structure).

× Yes, I love to take photos of modern buildings that are outlined by the architectures and constructed by skilled workers.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of modern buildings that are designed by architects and constructed by skilled workers.

Use 'taking' or 'to take' consistently; 'taking' is more natural here. 'The architectures' is incorrect: use 'architects' (people) or 'architecture' (uncountable). 'Designed by architects' is the correct passive attribution. This addresses incorrect noun usage and verb form choice.

× Usually, I post these unique photos to my social media for remembering of the places I visited.

✓ Usually, I post these unique photos on my social media to remember the places I visited.

Use 'on' with 'social media' not 'to'. 'For remembering of' is ungrammatical; use the infinitive 'to remember' or 'as a reminder of'. This corrects preposition and verb form issues.

× Yes, I would like to visit Eiffel Tower which is Stratford in Paris.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower, which is in Paris.

Include the definite article 'the' with 'Eiffel Tower'. 'Which is Stratford in Paris' is incorrect: remove 'Stratford' (irrelevant) and use 'in Paris'. This fixes article and preposition/location errors.

× This tower is very famous and uh from a years I plan I'm planning to visit there but don't get time.

✓ This tower is very famous and, for years, I have been planning to visit it but haven't had the time.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been planning' to express an action continuing from the past to now. 'From a years' is incorrect; use 'for years'. 'Visit there' should be 'visit it'. 'Don't get time' should be 'haven't had the time'. This addresses tense and phrase errors.

× It is very famous and included in movies and also films.

✓ It is very famous and is included in movies and films.

Use 'is included' passive form for parallel structure. 'Movies and films' are near synonyms; keep both if desired but maintain correct verb 'is included'. This fixes sentence structure and verb form.

× Yes, definitely I would like to live in a tall building because the view from the top floor is very pleasant and also enjoyable especially at night when all city is on lightning and it give me relaxation.

✓ Yes, definitely I would like to live in a tall building because the view from the top floor is very pleasant and enjoyable, especially at night when the whole city is lit up and it gives me relaxation.

Use 'the whole city' or 'the entire city' for correctness. 'Is on lightning' is incorrect; use 'is lit up' or 'is illuminated'. 'It give' must be 'it gives' (subject-verb agreement). Also remove redundant 'also' and keep parallel adjectives 'pleasant and enjoyable'. This corrects present participle usage, preposition and subject-verb agreement.