Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct repetition and grammar, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating words and fix noun phrases (e.g., 'apartment blocks').

Exemplo: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. Most houses here are two or three storeys, and there are a few low-rise apartment blocks, so the neighbourhood feels fairly low-density and residential.

Sugestão: Improve fluency and accuracy by correcting collocations and tense, and add a brief reason with a linking word. Keep it to two or three sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: To be honest, although I enjoy photography, I rarely photograph buildings. I prefer taking pictures of natural scenery and people because they seem more expressive and offer more variety.

Sugestão: Finish your answer and correct the building name and some grammar. Use a clear topic sentence, give two specific reasons connected with linking words, and avoid leaving the sentence unfinished.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic landmark that appears in many films, and it has a romantic atmosphere. Also, I want to see the city views from the top and take some photographs.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and remove repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about benefits. Correct articles and pluralisation (e.g., 'a two- or three-storey house').

Exemplo: To be honest, I'd prefer to live in a two- or three-storey house with a garden because it feels closer to nature and offers more privacy. In addition, the outdoor space would let me grow plants and give my children and dogs room to play.

× No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home most of the homes are two or three story houses.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home; most of the homes are two- or three-story houses.

This sentence lacked plural consistency and correct hyphenation: 'two or three story houses' should be 'two- or three-story houses' to show the shared modifier 'story' for both numbers and to form a compound adjective; a semicolon or period is needed to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: Use a semicolon or separate into two sentences and hyphenate compound adjectives when a number modifies a noun (e.g., 'two-story').

× Also there are some few few also there are a few low rise apartments blocks.

✓ Also, there are a few low-rise apartment blocks.

The phrase 'some few few' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'a few' is the correct quantifier. 'Low rise' should be hyphenated as 'low-rise' when used as a compound adjective before a noun, and 'apartments blocks' should be 'apartment blocks' (singular noun 'apartment' used attributively). Suggestion: Use a single appropriate quantifier ('a few') and hyphenate compound adjectives ('low-rise apartment blocks').

× So this area feels quite low density in the residential

✓ So this residential area feels quite low-density.

Word order and noun usage were incorrect: 'low density' should be 'low-density' as a compound adjective modifying 'area', and 'in the residential' is incomplete; 'residential area' is the correct noun phrase. Suggestion: Place adjectives before the noun and hyphenate compound adjectives ('low-density residential area').

× To be honest, although I enjoy taking photography, I rarely take photos of buildings.

✓ To be honest, although I enjoy photography, I rarely take photos of buildings.

The phrase 'taking photography' is incorrect; the noun 'photography' is used without 'taking'. Using 'enjoy photography' is more natural and grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'enjoy photography' or 'enjoy taking photographs' rather than 'taking photography'.

× I prefer snap pictures of natural scenery and people because they feel more expressive and varied.

✓ I prefer to snap pictures of natural scenery and people because they feel more expressive and varied.

After 'prefer' you can use the infinitive 'to snap' or the gerund 'snapping'; in this sentence the base form 'snap' is incorrect. Use 'to snap pictures' or 'snapping pictures'. Suggestion: Use consistent verb forms after 'prefer' (e.g., 'prefer to snap' or 'prefer snapping').

× Yes, definitely, I would love to visit the Effort Tower in Paris because it is an iconic landmark of France and its appearance so many times in movies.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic landmark of France and appears so many times in movies.

Two issues: the proper noun is 'Eiffel Tower', not 'Effort Tower'. 'Its appearance so many times in movies' is ungrammatical; use the verb 'appears' to describe frequency. Also the original run-on sentence needed separation. Suggestion: Use correct proper names and active verb form for frequency 'appears', and split into clearer sentences if needed.

× Also it is very romantic so I would like to

✓ Also, it is very romantic, so I would like to visit it.

The sentence is incomplete and fragments; 'so I would like to' must be followed by an object or verb. Adding 'visit it' completes the thought. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Ensure sentences are complete and include necessary object or verb to finish the idea.

× To be honest, I would prefer to live in two or three story house with a garden.

✓ To be honest, I would prefer to live in a two- or three-story house with a garden.

Missing article 'a' before 'two- or three-story house'; numbers with shared noun require hyphenation ('two- or three-story'). Suggestion: Include the indefinite article and hyphenate compound adjectives ('a two- or three-story house').

× It feels more close it feels closer to nature and the more private.

✓ It feels closer to nature and more private.

Redundant and ungrammatical phrasing: 'more close' is incorrect; use 'closer'. The phrase 'the more private' is unnecessary and incorrect article use; use 'more private'. Remove repetition. Suggestion: Use 'closer' instead of 'more close' and avoid redundant repetition.

× I also like outdoor space where I can grow plants and let my children and dogs play.

✓ I also like outdoor space where I can grow plants and let my children and my dogs play.

Mainly style: add 'my' before 'dogs' for parallel possessive structure. Grammatically original sentence is acceptable, but parallel possessives improve clarity. Suggestion: Keep possessive determiners parallel when listing people and animals ('my children and my dogs').