Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct quantifier and tense errors, and limit to 2–3 supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. The tallest one I remember is the Oxygen Towers in Visakhapatnam, which has 31 floors, and I found it impressive when I first saw it because of its height and modern design.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and filler words. Give a brief reason and one specific example of what you photograph instead. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' for clarity.

Exemplo: No, I don't usually photograph buildings because I'm more attracted to natural scenery. For example, I often take photos of sunsets and mountain views when I go hiking.

Sugestão: Be direct and complete your sentences. Say why you dislike visiting apartments and, if possible, mention a type of building you would visit instead to add depth. Use correct comparatives and fix article use.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't want to visit an apartment building because I prefer standalone architectural landmarks. If I could visit a building, I'd choose a historic cathedral or museum to appreciate its design and history.

Sugestão: State your opinion clearly, give one or two concise reasons, and avoid awkward phrasing. Replace vague phrases with specific descriptions of the kind of home you prefer.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I have a fear of heights. I prefer living in a detached house with private outdoor space where I have more privacy and feel comfortable.

× Yes, there are enormous amount of tall buildings near my home and I the first tallest building I have ever known is Oxygen Towers in Visakhapatnam, which is of 31 floors and, uh, which is very fascinating for me at that point of time.

✓ Yes, there are an enormous number of tall buildings near my home, and the tallest building I have ever known is Oxygen Towers in Visakhapatnam, which has 31 floors and was very fascinating to me at that time.

Incorrect quantifier: 'enormous amount' is used with uncountable nouns; 'buildings' is countable so use 'an enormous number of'. Also sentence had additional grammar issues addressed: unnecessary 'I the first' replaced with 'the tallest', 'which is of 31 floors' corrected to 'which has 31 floors', and tense/time phrase made consistent ('was very fascinating to me at that time'). Suggestion: match quantifiers to countable/uncountable nouns and simplify clauses for clarity.

× No, I'm not interested in taking, uh, photos of buildings. I'm more into nature and picturesque landscapes and all. I never usually take photos of buildings. I usually prefer to take pictures.

✓ No, I'm not interested in taking photos of buildings. I'm more into nature and picturesque landscapes. I don't usually take photos of buildings; I prefer taking pictures of natural scenes.

Redundant and inconsistent use of adverbs: 'never usually' is contradictory; use 'don't usually' for habitual present. Also 'taking, uh, photos' had filler removed and repetitive sentences combined for clarity. Suggestion: avoid contradictory adverbs and choose one appropriate frequency adverb; remove fillers.

× Uh, actually no, because I'm not really into apartments. I prefer individual architectural pieces than apartments, and I feel like even if I want to visit a apartment, it invades the privacy of.

✓ Actually no, because I'm not really into apartments. I prefer individual architectural pieces to apartments, and I feel that if I wanted to visit an apartment, it would invade someone's privacy.

Article error: 'a apartment' should be 'an apartment' because 'apartment' begins with a vowel sound. Preposition error: 'prefer ... than' should be 'prefer ... to'. Incomplete clause 'invades the privacy of' lacked an object; clarified to 'invade someone's privacy' and adjusted tense/mood to conditional 'if I wanted'. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sounds, pair 'prefer' with 'to', and complete objects of prepositions.

× Uh, no, I do not want to live in a tall building because I have fear of heights. I prefer something more individual and something more of closed place where I cannot see people everyday.

✓ No, I do not want to live in a tall building because I have a fear of heights. I prefer something more private and enclosed where I do not see people every day.

Missing article: 'have fear of heights' should be 'have a fear of heights'. Word choice/adjective use: 'more individual' and 'more of closed place' are unnatural; use 'more private and enclosed'. Adverb spacing: 'everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverbial phrase) — here use 'every day'. Also 'cannot see people' changed to present habitual 'do not see people' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct articles with idiomatic expressions, choose appropriate adjectives, and distinguish 'everyday' vs 'every day'.