Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "very unusual" and "in here").

Exemplo: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. I live in a rural town surrounded by rice fields and hills, which is quite far from the city, so skyscrapers are rare there.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity, use correct verb forms and connect ideas with linking words. Be specific about when and why you took photos, and avoid vague phrases like "make me remember."

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Since tall buildings are uncommon in my hometown, I photograph them when I travel. For example, when I visited Manila with my brother and cousin last year, I took many photos of the skyscrapers to remember the trip.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence and correct tense/phrasing. Avoid awkward comparisons—use linking words to explain why you want to visit and relate it to your past experience concisely.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is the tallest building in the world. Having enjoyed the view from Taipei 101 in Taiwan, I would like to climb the Burj Khalifa to see the surrounding skyline and experience another spectacular view.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer, then give a clear, specific reason. Improve phrasing for naturalness (e.g. "in case of emergencies such as earthquakes"). Keep it to two sentences maximum.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. Although I enjoy looking at skyscrapers, I worry that in emergencies such as earthquakes it would be harder and more dangerous to evacuate from a high floor.

× There are no tall buildings near our house because I live in a town where we could only see the rice fields and we are partly in a mountainous areas that is far from the city, so it's very unusual to see tall buildings in here.

✓ There are no tall buildings near our house because I live in a town where we can only see rice fields and we are partly in a mountainous area that is far from the city, so it's very unusual to see tall buildings here.

Errors: 'could only see the rice fields' – modal/tense choice (see explanation under Present tense and Modal) and unnecessary definite article with plural; 'in a mountainous areas' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'areas'; 'in here' is incorrect preposition use. Correction details: use 'can only see rice fields' to express general ability/observation (present tense); remove 'the' before 'rice fields' because speaking generally; change 'areas' to singular 'area' to match article 'a' or remove 'a' and use plural; use 'here' without 'in'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches articles ('a' with singular noun) and use 'can' for general, habitual ability, and prefer 'here' not 'in here'.

× I take photos of buildings because I don't usually see it in my hometown.

✓ I take photos of buildings because I don't usually see them in my hometown.

Error: incorrect pronoun form/number: 'it' refers to plural 'buildings'. Use plural object pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to antecedent.

× For example, when I want to Manila with my brother and my cousin, I took lots of photos of the tall buildings over that place because it could make me remember.

✓ For example, when I went to Manila with my brother and my cousin, I took lots of photos of the tall buildings there because they helped me remember.

Errors: 'want to Manila' is incorrect verb and preposition; should be 'went to Manila' (past tense + preposition). 'over that place' is unnatural preposition use; use 'there'. 'it could make me remember' has wrong subject and modal/tense: 'they helped me remember' makes clear that the photos (they) caused the memory. Suggestion: use correct past tense verbs for past events, choose appropriate prepositions (to, there), and match subject pronoun number.

× I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is known as the highest building in the world and just like as I experience in Taiwan, the Taipei 101, I wanted to climb that building as well and see the beauty of the surrounding area.

✓ I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is known as the tallest building in the world, and just as I experienced in Taiwan with Taipei 101, I want to climb that building as well and see the beauty of the surrounding area.

Errors: 'highest' vs 'tallest' – preference: 'tallest building' is idiomatic. 'just like as I experience' mixes forms; use 'just as I experienced' (past) or 'as I did when I experienced' since Taipei 101 visit is past. 'I wanted to climb' uses past tense inconsistently with 'would like' and general desire—use present 'I want to climb'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use idiomatic adjective 'tallest'.

× Although I love seeing tall buildings, I would not want to live in a tall building because for example, in case of an emergencies like earthquakes, it could be very difficult for me to get to safety and be in a safe place.

✓ Although I love seeing tall buildings, I would not want to live in a tall building because, for example, in the case of an emergency like an earthquake, it could be very difficult for me to get to safety.

Errors: 'in case of an emergencies' mixes singular/plural and article; correct 'in the case of an emergency'. 'like earthquakes' should be 'like an earthquake' or 'like earthquakes' with matching article/number; 'be in a safe place' is redundant after 'get to safety'—omit. Suggestion: keep noun number consistent, use correct articles, and avoid redundancy.