Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Focus on clear, grammatical sentences and relevant vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., “television” → “tower”, “toddlers” → incorrect).

Exemplo: Yes. I live in central Guangzhou, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, the Canton Tower is a prominent landmark, and it is surrounded by luxury hotels such as the Rosewood and the Four Seasons.

Sugestão: Answer directly and briefly; mention reasons and a personal detail if relevant. Use correct names and vocabulary (e.g., “Canton Tower”, “tower” not “television”), and avoid confusing statements like “I always live in it.” Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. For instance, I frequently photograph the Canton Tower because it is the tallest tower in Asia and makes an impressive subject, especially at night when it is lit up.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer then support with specific reasons. Correct pronunciation/naming and avoid long run-on sentences. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and concise phrasing to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Canton Tower. I want to go because it is the tallest tower in Asia and a major landmark, and visiting would give me great views of Guangzhou and plenty of photo opportunities.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly and give two concise reasons. Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “spectacular scenery”, correct hotel names, “Canton Tower”). Avoid vague or mixed-up phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer spectacular views of the city. For example, living in a high-rise near the Canton Tower would allow me to see the tower and city skyline every day, which I find enjoyable.

× Definitely it's because I live in the center of the Guangzhou and near the my homes have the many toddlers, the televisions.

✓ Definitely. It's because I live in the center of Guangzhou and near my home there are many tall buildings and television towers.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before proper noun 'Guangzhou' and before 'my homes' and 'many toddlers' (which appears to be a mistranscription of 'tall buildings'). Remove 'the' before city names and use 'my home' (singular) or 'my homes' without 'the' depending on meaning. Also 'the many toddlers' is incorrect here; the intended noun is likely 'tall buildings' or 'towers'. Rephrase to 'there are many tall buildings and television towers' to make the sentence grammatical and clear. Suggestion: avoid placing 'the' before place names and use 'there are' to introduce plural items.

× The most important television is the Canon Tower.

✓ The most important tower is the Canton Tower.

This sentence has wrong word choice and unclear structure. 'Television' is the wrong noun; the speaker likely means 'tower'. Proper noun is 'Canton Tower' (not 'Canon'). Use 'the' before a specific tower: 'the Canton Tower.' Suggestion: check noun choice and proper names for accuracy.

× It is landmark of the Guangzhou and it is surrounded by a lot of luxurious hotel like rosewood and four season.

✓ It is a landmark of Guangzhou and it is surrounded by a lot of luxurious hotels like the Rosewood and the Four Seasons.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'landmark' and incorrect 'the Guangzhou' — city names generally do not take 'the.' 'Hotel' should be plural 'hotels' to match 'a lot of.' Brand names of hotels take 'the' when referring to the chain properties (the Rosewood, the Four Seasons). Suggestion: use 'a landmark of Guangzhou' and pluralize nouns to match quantifiers.

× Sure, I always take a picture, take some photos about canoe towers.

✓ Sure, I always take pictures of the Canton Tower.

Awkward phrasing 'take a picture, take some photos about' and wrong preposition 'about.' Use 'take pictures of' to indicate photographing something. Also correct the proper name 'Canton Tower.' Suggestion: use plural 'pictures' for habitual action and 'of' as the correct preposition.

× It is the tallest television tower in Asia, and it also is the landmark of Guangzhou.

✓ It is the tallest TV tower in Asia, and it is also the landmark of Guangzhou.

Word order 'also is' is acceptable but more natural as 'is also.' 'Television' is better as the adjective 'TV' in spoken English. Suggestion: place 'also' after the auxiliary or before the main verb for natural word order.

× It is surrounded by a lot of luxury hotels like Rosewood and Four Season, which are located here, mostly for the view of the canoe tower.

✓ It is surrounded by a lot of luxury hotels like the Rosewood and the Four Seasons, which are located here mostly for the view of the Canton Tower.

Use 'the' with specific hotel names and correct 'Four Season' to 'Four Seasons.' Remove unnecessary commas. Replace 'canoe' with 'Canton.' Suggestion: ensure correct brand names and use 'the' for specific well-known hotels.

× I always live in it.

✓ I don't live in it.

Context suggests the student does not live in the tower; statement 'I always live in it' is illogical. If the student meant they always stay there when visiting, say 'I always stay there when I visit.' If they meant habitually photographing, rephrase. Here correction assumes intended meaning was negation. Suggestion: clarify intended meaning and use appropriate verb ('live' vs 'stay').

× Serious, I like to visit the kennel Tower because it is the tallest television tower in Asia, and it also is the landmark of Guangzhou, and every year will have many tourists gathered here to take pictures, and it is surrounded by a lot of luxury hotels and tall buildings like rosewood.

✓ Seriously, I would like to visit the Canton Tower because it is the tallest TV tower in Asia and the landmark of Guangzhou. Every year many tourists gather here to take pictures, and it is surrounded by a lot of luxury hotels and tall buildings like the Rosewood.

Multiple errors: 'Serious' should be 'Seriously.' 'Kennel' and 'television' are wrong words—use 'Canton Tower' and 'TV tower.' Awkward tense 'every year will have many tourists gathered' should be 'every year many tourists gather' (simple present for habitual events). Plural 'hotels' and correct hotel name capitalization needed. Suggestion: break into two sentences, use simple present for habitual facts, and correct proper nouns.

× Sure us because you can look at many spectaculars the scenery like if you look live in the Rose world and four season hotel which are located here mostly for the view of the Kingdom Tower, you can look the tallest television tower in Asia's.

✓ Sure, because you can enjoy many spectacular views. If you live in the Rosewood or the Four Seasons hotel, which are located here mostly for the view of the Canton Tower, you can see the tallest TV tower in Asia.

This sentence contains pronoun and word-choice errors: 'us' is incorrect after 'Sure'; use a comma. 'Spectaculars the scenery' is wrong—use 'spectacular views' or 'scenery.' 'Look live' should be 'live.' 'Rose world' should be 'Rosewood.' 'Kingdom Tower' and 'television tower in Asia's' are incorrect; use 'Canton Tower' and 'you can see the tallest TV tower in Asia.' Suggestion: simplify the sentence, correct hotel names, and use 'see' for visual perception.