Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples. Avoid repetition and use correct articles and plural forms. Use a linking word for clarity if adding details.

Exemplo: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my hometown. For example, there is a large residential tower, a modern hospital, and a commercial office block close to the main road.

Sugestão: Improve vocabulary accuracy and sentence structure. Use one topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'photolic', 'natures', 'photos' as verb).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings. I especially like modern architecture because architects often use bold shapes and colours, so the facades and details make interesting photos.

Sugestão: Make a clear, fluent response: name the building, give one or two specific reasons using linking words, and avoid repetition. Correct tense and noun forms, and use precise descriptive vocabulary.

Exemplo: Yes. The Diamond Cruise building in my hometown attracts me the most because its shiny glass facade looks stunning from the outside, and inside it has intricate architectural details and an impressive atrium that I would love to see.

Sugestão: Organise your answer: give a clear opinion, then explain with specific benefits. Avoid hesitations and incorrect phrases ('explosive of sun'). Use natural collocations like 'enjoy the view' and 'lots of sunlight'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I dream of living in a penthouse on a tall building because I could enjoy wide views of the surrounding landscape and get plenty of natural light during the day.

× Yes, there are many many tall buildings near my hometown. It's include such a residential building, hospital and one of commercial building too.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my hometown. They include residential buildings, a hospital, and a commercial building.

Original has singular/plural mismatches and incorrect reference words. 'It's include' is wrong because 'it' + singular verb doesn't agree with intended plural list; use 'They include'. 'Such a residential building' should be plural 'residential buildings' to match 'many tall buildings'. Add article 'a' before 'hospital' and 'a commercial building' for correctness.

× To be honest, I'm a photolic person. I love to take photos of natures, including sun, building uh, trees and et cetera.

✓ To be honest, I'm a photographic person. I love to take photos of nature, including the sun, buildings, trees, and so on.

'Photolic' is not an English adjective; use 'photographic' or 'a photography enthusiast'. 'Natures' is incorrect; use the uncountable noun 'nature'. Items in a list should be plural where appropriate: 'buildings'. Use 'the sun' and 'and so on' instead of 'et cetera' in speech for clarity.

× In a recent year, uh, people hire architecture to design their building to look very active.

✓ In recent years, people hire architects to design their buildings to look more modern and dynamic.

'In a recent year' is unnatural; 'in recent years' is better. 'Hire architecture' is incorrect: 'architecture' is a field, use the agent noun 'architects'. 'Their building' should be plural 'their buildings' to match 'people'. 'Very active' is odd for buildings; 'more modern and dynamic' is clearer.

× And I yes, I definitely like to photos their building.

✓ And yes, I definitely like to photograph their buildings.

'Like to photos' mixes verb and noun incorrectly; use the verb 'photograph' or 'take photos of'. 'Their building' should be plural 'their buildings' to match general reference to people.

× Yes, a very famous building in my hometown is uh diamond cruise building it show uh, I definitely want to I definitely would like to visit this building because uh it looked very attractive to outside and also contain uh architecture, uh architecture also built in uh attractive design in the inner side also.

✓ Yes, a very famous building in my hometown is the Diamond Cruise Building. I would definitely like to visit it because it looks attractive from the outside and has interesting architecture and an attractive interior design.

Run-on sentence with repetition and tense errors. Capitalize proper noun 'Diamond Cruise Building' and use the definite article 'the'. Split into two sentences. Use present tense 'looks' not 'looked' because speaking about current appearance. 'Contain architecture' is incorrect; use 'has interesting architecture' and 'attractive interior design' for clarity.

× Yes definitely, it is one of my dream I guess I want to live in a penthouse on a tall building, be uh to enjoy the outer surrounding views, natures and also also get explosive of sun.

✓ Yes, definitely. It is one of my dreams. I guess I want to live in a penthouse in a tall building to enjoy the surrounding views and nature, and to enjoy the sunlight.

'One of my dream' should be plural 'one of my dreams'. 'Live in a penthouse on a tall building' is better as 'in a tall building'. 'Outer surrounding views' is redundant; use 'surrounding views'. 'Natures' should be 'nature' (uncountable). 'Get explosive of sun' is incorrect and unclear; use 'enjoy the sunlight' or 'get plenty of sunlight'.