Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법과 단어 사용에서 오류가 있고 문장이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 주제문으로 시작한 것은 좋지만, 불필요하거나 의미가 불분명한 문장이 포함되어 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 구체적으로: 단수·복수와 관사(a/the) 사용을 고치고(present simple), 마지막 문장의 의미가 불분명하므로 제거하거나 명확히 하세요. 또한 연결어를 사용해 문장의 흐름을 개선하세요. 예: 'Yes, there are a few tall apartment buildings near my home. One of them is much taller than my house, so it stands out in the neighborhood.'

Exemplo: Yes, there are a few tall apartment buildings near my home. One of them is much taller than my house, so it stands out in the neighborhood.

Sugestão: 답변이 비교적 자연스럽고 구체적입니다. 다만 연결 표현을 더 명확히 하고 약간 더 구체적인 예시(예: 특정 건물이나 카메라 사용 방식)를 추가하면 더 효과적입니다. 길이는 2~3문장으로 적절하므로 유지하되, 연결어(since, because, especially)를 적절히 사용하고 어휘를 약간 확장하세요. 예: 'I often take photos of buildings, especially skyscrapers at sunset, because the light highlights their architectural details.'

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially skyscrapers at sunset, because the light highlights their architectural details and makes them look dramatic.

Sugestão: 핵심은 잘 전달되지만 문법(관사, 복수, 동사 일치)과 표현이 어색합니다. 장소 소개 시 국가 앞에 관사 불필요, 건물 이름 앞에는 관사 사용 여부에 유의하세요. 또한 구체적인 이유(전망대, 역사, 건축 등)를 하나 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 예: 'I would like to visit the Empire State Building in the United States because it is famous and offers great views from the observation deck.'

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building in the United States because it is famous and offers spectacular views from its observation deck.

Sugestão: 의사를 잘 전달했으나 표현이 반복되고 문법 오류(정관사·전치사·어순)와 어휘 선택 문제가 있습니다. 'top of the building' 대신 'on the top floor'나 'at the top'를 쓰고, 이유는 더 자연스럽게 'it takes a long time to get down'라고 표현하세요. 또한 마지막 문장은 중복되므로 한두 문장으로 간결하게 정리하세요. 예: 'Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, but not on the top floor because it takes a long time to get downstairs; I'd prefer a lower floor.'

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, but not on the top floor because it takes a long time to get downstairs, so I would prefer a lower floor.

× Yes, there are tall building near my house.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my house.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'there are'. Use plural when referring to more than one item; check subject following 'there are'.

× The apartment is building near my home and it is taller than my house.

✓ The apartment building near my home is taller than my house.

The phrase 'apartment building' needs to be combined as a noun phrase; article placement and word order were incorrect. Move 'near my home' after the noun and remove the extra 'is' to form a clear noun phrase and comparison.

× It is required during six months.

✓ It is required for six months.

Use the preposition 'for' with a duration expression like 'six months'. 'During' is used with a time period in which something happens, not the duration. Also confirm whether 'required' is the intended meaning; if you mean 'available' or 'occupied', choose a different verb.

× Yes, I want to visit the Empire State Building which is located in USA because Empire State Building is very famous and it have a lots of entertainment store.

✓ Yes, I want to visit the Empire State Building, which is located in the USA, because the Empire State Building is very famous and it has a lot of entertainment stores.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'USA' and with 'Empire State Building' on subsequent references. 'Have' must be 'has' for third person singular. 'A lots of' is incorrect; use 'a lot of' or 'lots of', and 'store' should be plural 'stores'. Also add commas around the relative clause for clarity.

× ...because Empire State Building is very famous and it have a lots of entertainment store.

✓ ...because the Empire State Building is very famous and it has a lot of entertainment stores.

Third person singular subject 'it' requires verb 'has'. Also correct articles and quantifier: 'a lot of' and plural 'stores'.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building, but I don't want to live in the top of the building because it is very long time to get down.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building, but I don't want to live at the top of the building because it takes a long time to get down.

Use the preposition 'at the top' rather than 'in the top'. 'It is very long time' is ungrammatical; use 'it takes a long time' to express duration. Also include 'the' before 'top'.

× So I want to live in tall building but at low.

✓ So I want to live in a tall building but on a lower floor.

'At low' is not correct English. Use 'on a lower floor' or 'on a low floor' to specify position within the building. Also include the article 'a' before 'tall building'.