Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise: state clearly whether there are tall buildings, give one specific detail (e.g., types or height) and avoid extra phrases like “good job.” Use a topic sentence then one supporting detail. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, there are some residential buildings near my home, but they are mostly low-rise, about three to six storeys high. For example, the apartment block opposite my street is only four storeys tall, so the area feels open and not crowded.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and replace awkward collocations with natural phrases. Give one extra specific detail about what you photograph and why, using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Keep answers within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because I like their shapes and details. For example, I often take pictures of old brick facades and modern glass towers in my city because the contrast between them is visually interesting.

Sugestão: This answer is unclear and contains many errors. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the building you want to visit. Then give 1–2 supporting details: where it is, what it offers, and why you want to visit. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “mixed-use building,” “market,” “within walking distance”) and simple linking words like “because” or “for example.” Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the new mixed-use market near my house because it has shops, food stalls and small galleries. For example, it is within a ten-minute walk from my home and I want to try different foods and see local crafts there.

Sugestão: Clarify your opinion with one clear topic sentence and one supporting reason. Avoid vague phrases like “browsing horizons” and unclear references. Use specific benefits (e.g., views, light, amenities) and linkers such as “because” or “however.” Keep to 2 sentences.

Exemplo: I would consider living in a tall building because it offers great views and more sunlight. However, I might prefer a low-rise apartment if I value quiet and easier access to the street.

× You used good simple vocabulary (tall buildings, skyscrapers, low rise department) but there are a couple of awkward collocations (“low rise department” and “amazed about it”).

✓ You used good, simple vocabulary (tall buildings, skyscrapers, low-rise department store), but there are a couple of awkward collocations ('low-rise department store' and 'amazed by it').

The original contains adjective and noun collocation errors and a preposition choice error. 'Low rise' should be hyphenated as 'low-rise' when used as a compound adjective before a noun, and the correct noun is 'department store', not 'department'. Also, the verb 'amaze' is typically followed by the preposition 'by' ('amazed by'), not 'about'. Suggestion: use 'low-rise department store' and 'amazed by it' to improve naturalness and accuracy.

× Yeah, there is a building which mains are mixed and there is a big small near my house.

✓ Yeah, there is a building whose uses are mixed and there is a big mall near my house.

The sentence has multiple errors. 'Which mains are mixed' is ungrammatical; use 'whose uses are mixed' to indicate possession/characteristics of the building. 'Big small' is a mistaken word choice; likely intended 'big mall'. This fixes subject-reference and noun choice issues. Suggestion: use 'a building whose uses are mixed' and 'a big mall' for clarity.

× I should go there in the American, you know?

✓ I should go there to the American mall, you know?

The original uses the preposition 'in' incorrectly and an unclear noun phrase 'the American'. If referring to a place called 'American mall' or a mall with American goods, use 'to the American mall'. Always choose 'to' for movement toward a place. Clarify the noun phrase to specify the location.

× Yeah, uh, there are so kinds of different, uh, products and there is within walking distance from my house.

✓ Yeah, there are so many kinds of different products, and it is within walking distance from my house.

The original lacks proper determiners and subject reference. 'So kinds of different' should be 'so many kinds of different' or better 'many different kinds of products'. Also 'there is within walking distance from my house' lacks a clear subject; replace with 'it is within walking distance' referring to the mall/building. Suggestion: 'there are many different kinds of products, and it is within walking distance from my house.'

× It's common for me and I really like it.

✓ It's common for me to go there, and I really like it.

The phrase 'It's common for me' is vague and needs an infinitive to indicate the habitual action: 'common for me to go there'. Adding 'to go there' clarifies the pronoun reference and the action. Suggestion: specify the action after 'common for me'.

× While it depends, sometimes I think it's a good choice to live in a tall building because you have a higher and wider browsing horizons.

✓ While it depends, sometimes I think it's a good choice to live in a tall building because you have a higher and wider view of the horizon.

The phrase 'browsing horizons' is incorrect collocation; likely meant 'broader horizons' or 'view of the horizon'. Also 'a higher and wider' should modify a noun like 'view' or 'perspective'. Modal/auxiliary usage 'While it depends' is acceptable but could be 'It depends'. Suggestion: use 'a higher, broader view of the horizon' or 'broader horizons'.

× You know is attractive for me, especially when you can when you are writing something in inner head of the building.

✓ You know, it is attractive to me, especially when I can write something in my head inside the building.

Pronoun and clause structure are incorrect. 'You know is attractive for me' needs a subject: 'it is attractive to me'. 'When you can when you are writing something in inner head of the building' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'when I can write something in my head while inside the building'. Use 'to me' (not 'for me') after 'attractive' and fix the clause order. Suggestion: 'it is attractive to me, especially when I can think or write in my head while inside the building.'