Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 文法と語彙の誤りを直し、簡潔で自然な表現にすること。具体的には冠詞（a/the）の使い方、名詞の複数形、形容詞の選択（glimpse→open/green）を修正し、余分な語を削って話を明確にする。例を述べる際は結論→詳細の順で話し、1～2の接続詞（for example, because）を使うと論理的になる。発音や流暢さは簡潔な文を練習して向上させると良い。

Exemplo: There aren't many tall buildings near my home because my town is mainly residential and surrounded by open green space. For example, many local farmers grow vegetables nearby, and the fields are very attractive during the growing season.

Sugestão: 発言を簡潔にまとめ、冗長な語（like, also, as well）を避けること。固有名詞は文に自然に織り込み、具体的な理由や状況を短く続ける。語彙は'landscapes', 'scenery'などの語を使うと自然。センテンスは2～3文に収め、接続詞（especially, because）でつなぐと良い。

Exemplo: I prefer taking photos of natural landscapes, such as ocean views and mountain scenery. My hometown, Nagano, is famous for its mountains, especially in winter, so I often photograph snowy scenes because they look so beautiful.

Sugestão: 発音間違いや語の選択（"Tokyo Slightly"は不明確）を修正し、建物名は正確に言うこと。理由と具体的な行動（go up to observation decks）を簡潔に述べ、接続詞でつなげると自然。語彙に'iconic', 'observation deck', 'panoramic views'を使うと良い。

Exemplo: I'd like to visit Tokyo to see famous landmarks such as Tokyo Skytree and Tokyo Tower. These iconic buildings have observation decks, and I'd love to go up there to enjoy panoramic views of the city.

Sugestão: 考えを明確に整理し、理由を簡潔に2つまで述べる。語彙と文法の誤り（a tall building hard the safety things, automatically locked service）を修正し、'more secure', 'security services', 'automatic locks'などの自然な語を使う。冗長な言い直し（uh）を減らし、文を短く保つ練習をする。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building in the future because they usually offer better security, such as automatic door locks and 24-hour security services. Also, living high up often provides nicer views and less street noise.

× Near my home there aren't many tall building because my town is mainly residential and surrounded by glimpse space.

✓ Near my home there aren't many tall buildings because my town is mainly residential and surrounded by open space.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'many'. Also 'glimpse space' is incorrect; likely intended 'open space'. Use plural with quantifiers like 'many'. Suggestion: Use 'many' with plural nouns; replace unclear phrase with 'open space'.

× For example, there are lot of farmers nearby where people grow vegetable and it's the glowing season now.

✓ For example, there are a lot of farmers nearby who grow vegetables, and it's the growing season now.

'There are lot of' is missing the article 'a' -> 'a lot of'. 'Where people grow vegetable' should be 'who grow vegetables' to refer to the farmers and use plural. 'Glowing season' is a wrong word; 'growing season' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'a lot of' for many, use 'who' for people, and pluralize countable nouns.

× Well, I prefer to take photo of like nature things, for example like ocean view and also the Mountain View as well.

✓ Well, I prefer to take photos of natural things, for example an ocean view and also mountain views.

Use plural 'photos' when speaking generally. 'Nature things' should be 'natural things' or 'nature scenes'. 'Ocean view' needs an article 'an'. 'Mountain View' should be lowercase and plural 'mountain views' for generality. Suggestion: Use correct articles and plural forms for general statements.

× Especially in my hometown, the name is Nagano.

✓ Especially, my hometown is Nagano.

The phrase 'the name is Nagano' is awkward; 'my hometown is Nagano' is natural. 'Especially' can begin the sentence but placing 'the name is' is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use concise noun linking: 'My hometown is Nagano.'

× It's popular for the nature of the mountain, especially the winter season.

✓ It's popular for its mountain scenery, especially in the winter season.

'Popular for the nature of the mountain' is unidiomatic. Use 'popular for its mountain scenery' and preposition 'in' for seasons ('in the winter'). Suggestion: Use 'for' with nouns (popular for) and 'in' with seasons.

× It's so beautiful that's why I like it.

✓ It's so beautiful, and that's why I like it.

Two independent clauses need a conjunction or punctuation. Add 'and' or use a semicolon. Suggestion: Connect clauses properly: 'It's so beautiful, so I like it' or 'It's so beautiful, and that's why I like it.'

× Well, I prefer to take photo of like nature things, for example like ocean view and also the Mountain View as well.

✓ Well, I prefer taking photos of natural scenes, for example an ocean view and mountain views.

'Prefer' is commonly followed by a gerund ('prefer taking') when speaking generally. This corrects verb form and eliminates redundancy. Suggestion: Use 'prefer doing' for general preferences.

× There are iconic landmarks and I'd love to go up to observation decks to enjoy the spectacular panorama T views of the city.

✓ There are iconic landmarks, and I'd love to go up to the observation decks to enjoy the spectacular panoramic views of the city.

Add definite article 'the' before 'observation decks' when referring to specific known decks. 'Panorama T views' is wrong; use 'panoramic views'. Also add 'the' for specificity. Suggestion: Use correct adjectives ('panoramic') and articles.

× I'd like to visit Tokyo in the near future to see Tokyo Slightly and Tokyo Tower.

✓ I'd like to visit Tokyo in the near future to see Tokyo Skytree and Tokyo Tower.

'Tokyo Slightly' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'Tokyo Skytree', a landmark; correction fixes the proper noun. No preposition error but proper noun correction is needed. Suggestion: Use correct names of landmarks.

× In the future, yes, because a tall building hard the safety things, I think they have the automatically locked service and also they're more safe rather than the lower building because, uh, the Security Service is so.

✓ In the future, yes, because tall buildings handle safety well; I think they have automatic locking systems, and they're safer than lower buildings because of better security services.

Multiple issues: 'a tall building hard the safety things' is ungrammatical—use plural 'tall buildings' and verb 'handle'. 'Automatically locked service' should be 'automatic locking systems'. 'More safe' should be 'safer'. 'Rather than the lower building' should be 'than lower buildings'. Suggestion: Use comparative 'safer', pluralize nouns and use appropriate verbs and noun phrases.