Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Correct errors: remove extra words and use singular/plural correctly (e.g., “there are a few buildings near my home. It’s called Depot City. There are several top universities and some offices there.”).

Exemplo: Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home. For example, my neighborhood is called Depot City, and it has several university buildings and office blocks, so the skyline is quite prominent.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and use clearer linking words. Give a brief topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Fix repetitions and colloquialisms (e.g., replace “kinda” with “quite”).

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially at sunset. Because the light is warm and the skyline looks very aesthetic, I enjoy capturing those views after work.

Sugestão: Clarify the place names and give a specific reason. Use correct nouns and avoid unclear words like “mineral pizza” and “so peak.” State one clear building or place and explain why using linking words. For example, say the exact landmark and describe what appeals to you.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Sydney Opera House in Australia because its unique architecture is impressive, and I think every angle would be very photogenic.

Sugestão: Make a clear opinion statement and give one or two coherent reasons with linking words. Correct grammar and remove fragmented clauses. For example, say you prefer low-rise housing because of proximity and convenience.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I prefer low-rise homes because they are usually closer to schools and public spaces, so daily travel is easier and more convenient.

× Yes, there are a few buildings in near my home.

✓ Yes, there are a few buildings near my home.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'near'. Use 'near' alone to indicate proximity. Suggestion: remove extra preposition: 'near my home'.

× It's Depot City.

✓ It's called Depot City.

The sentence as given is understandable but sounds incomplete. Adding 'called' clarifies that you are naming the place. Suggestion: use 'called' when introducing a place name.

× It's a lot of top university there and some office is already there.

✓ There are many top universities and some offices there already.

'A lot of' needs a noun form and agreement: 'a lot of universities' or better 'many top universities'. Also plural forms are required: 'universities' and 'offices'. Word order improved by placing 'there' after the noun phrase. Suggestion: use 'many' for countable plural and ensure plural nouns.

× It's a lot of top university there and some office is already there.

✓ There are many top universities and some offices there already.

The verb 'is' does not agree with plural nouns ('universities', 'offices'). Use 'are' for plural subjects. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement: plural subject -> 'are'.

× Yes I do, especially when the sunset after after after work.

✓ Yes, I do, especially at sunset after work.

Use the preposition 'at' with 'sunset' and remove repeated words. 'After work' is the correct time phrase. Suggestion: say 'at sunset after work' for natural timing.

× It's the view, it's kinda aesthetic so I get so I take photo of them.

✓ The view is kind of aesthetic, so I take photos of them.

Colloquial 'kinda' should be 'kind of' in semi-formal replies. Use 'photos' plural for multiple buildings. Remove extra filler 'so I get'. Suggestion: streamline to 'The view is kind of aesthetic, so I take photos of them.'

× Yes, I want to visit a mineral pizza in Australia and some public mall in Australia because there are so peak and so aesthetic every corner for me.

✓ Yes, I want to visit a Mineral Plaza in Australia and some public malls in Australia because they are so picturesque and aesthetic at every corner for me.

'a mineral pizza' seems to be a mis-heard name; assuming 'Mineral Plaza' (proper noun) requires capitalization and 'a' may be unnecessary. 'Public mall' should be plural 'public malls' if speaking generally. 'So peak' is incorrect; likely intended 'so picturesque' or 'so appealing'. Use 'they are' to refer to plural malls. Suggestion: use correct proper nouns, pluralize where appropriate, and choose the right adjective ('picturesque' or 'aesthetic').

× Yes, I want to visit a mineral pizza in Australia and some public mall in Australia because there are so peak and so aesthetic every corner for me.

✓ Yes, I want to visit a Mineral Plaza in Australia and some public malls in Australia because they are so picturesque and aesthetically pleasing on every corner for me.

Use 'in Australia' once or appropriately; 'on every corner' is the natural prepositional phrase. 'Every corner for me' is awkward; replace with 'on every corner'. Suggestion: use 'on every corner' and 'aesthetically pleasing' for clarity.

× To be honest, I don't want to live in the tall building because it's so far if we want to cool other place for example like schools or public space, tall buildings. Are in the.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to live in tall buildings because they are so far from other places, for example schools or public spaces.

Drop the definite article before 'tall buildings' when speaking generally. Use plural 'they are' to match 'buildings'. Use 'far from' to indicate distance. Remove redundant and fragmented phrases. Suggestion: say 'I don't want to live in tall buildings because they are far from other places such as schools or public spaces.'

× To be honest, I don't want to live in the tall building because it's so far if we want to cool other place for example like schools or public space, tall buildings. Are in the.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to live in tall buildings because they are far from other places, for example schools or public spaces.

Original contains fragments and repetition ('Are in the.'). Rewriting removes fragments and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: form complete sentences and avoid repetition.