Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장의 구조와 표현을 더 명확히 하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 첫 문장에서 바로 위치를 말한 뒤 건물에 대한 구체적 정보(예: 용도, 외관, 위치와 유명한 이유)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 망설임 표현(umm, MMM)은 줄이고 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 논리적으로 연결하세요.

Exemplo: Yes. There is a tall building called the Yuxan Building near my home. It is quite well-known as a tourist attraction because of its modern glass facade and observation deck. For example, many visitors go there to enjoy the view of the city.

Sugestão: 답변을 더 자연스럽고 정확한 어휘로 바꾸세요. ‘take photos of buildings’에 대한 이유를 구체적으로 제시하고 문법(articles, plural, verb forms)을 교정하세요. 연결어(so, because, for example)를 사용해 이유와 예시를 명확히 하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I often photograph buildings because I find their shapes and architectural details interesting. For instance, I like to capture the contrast between old and new structures when I walk around the city.

Sugestão: 문법과 어순을 바로잡아 의도를 명확히 표현하세요. ‘dream university’ 이유와 방문 계획을 구체적으로 설명하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 예: 왜 그 대학을 가고 싶은지, 어떤 부분을 보고 싶은지 등을 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Swinburne University in Australia. It is my dream university because it has excellent design and technology programs, so I hope to go there as an exchange student and see the campus facilities in person.

Sugestão: 중복되는 접속사와 표현을 제거하고 더 자연스럽게 이유를 제시하세요. ‘can see more scenery on the top’ 대신 ‘have a great view’ 등 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 추가 세부사항(예: 어떤 풍경을 보고 싶은지, 장단점)을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I would. I think living in a tall building would give me a great view of the city and surrounding landscape. For example, I would enjoy watching the sunrise from a high-floor balcony.

× Yes, near my home umm there is Yuxam building.

✓ Yes, near my home there is the Yuxam Building.

'There is' structure is correct but the proper noun needs the definite article and capitalization; also correct name spelling 'Yuxam' -> 'Yuxan' if intended. Use 'the' before named buildings when specific, and capitalize building names. Be consistent and avoid filler words like 'umm'.

× So Yuxan building is a famous building known as a tourist building.

✓ The Yuxan Building is famous as a tourist attraction.

Redundant and awkward phrasing: 'famous building known as a tourist building' repeats 'building'. Use noun 'attraction' to convey meaning. Capitalize and use 'The' for specific building names.

× I think so. MMM.

✓ I think so.

Remove non-linguistic filler 'MMM' in written form. Keep concise utterance 'I think so.'

× Yes I do. I usually take a photos because I think building is a nice figure of taking photos and it has a large space to looking for.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually take photos because I think buildings are good subjects for photographs and they provide a lot of space to explore.

Multiple issues: 'a photos' mixes singular article with plural noun (singular/plural issue) and should be 'photos'. 'Building' should be plural or 'a building'—subject-verb agreement and noun number. 'Figure of taking photos' is incorrect collocation; use 'good subjects for photographs'. 'to looking for' is incorrect verb form; use 'to explore' or 'to look around'. Correct verb forms and pluralization.

× Yes, I want to visit Swinburne University in Australia. The there is my dream university when I get become a exchange student, so I want to visit there someday.

✓ Yes, I want to visit Swinburne University in Australia. It is my dream university; when I become an exchange student, I want to study there someday.

'The there is' is ungrammatical; use 'It is'. 'Get become' is incorrect verb combination; use 'become'. Article error: 'a exchange student' should be 'an exchange student'. 'Visit there' is odd when referring to attending; use 'study there'.

× Yes I do because I think because tall building can see more scenery on the top and it has a nice view to see so I want to live in a tall building someday.

✓ Yes, I do because I think tall buildings offer more scenery from the top and have nice views, so I want to live in a tall building someday.

Subject-verb agreement and third person singular: 'tall building can see' incorrectly gives agency to the building; use 'tall buildings offer' or 'you can see more scenery from the top'. Also remove duplicated 'because' and awkward phrase 'a nice view to see' — 'have nice views' is natural. Use plural 'buildings' when speaking generally.