Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep it under 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. My city has expanded rapidly, so many high‑rise residential blocks dominate the skyline. Because of their height, they offer nice views of the river and parks nearby.

Sugestão: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Use linking words to explain when and why you take photos, and give one concrete example.

Exemplo: Yes, I often photograph interesting buildings, especially historical ones. For example, last year I took photos of an old cathedral to study its carved details because I find architectural craftsmanship fascinating.

Sugestão: Remove fillers and improve accuracy and coherence. Give one clear reason and a specific detail (e.g., what you would do there). Keep sentences grammatical and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because of its iconic design. I would go up to the viewing platform to see the city panorama and take photos at sunset because many films show it as a romantic spot.

Sugestão: Correct grammar (subject‑verb agreement and word choice) and be specific about which facilities matter to you. Use linking words to connect ideas and limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because modern skyscrapers often offer good amenities. For instance, they usually have gyms, secure entry systems and on‑site maintenance, which makes daily life more convenient.

× Yes, there are quite a few tall buildings close to area where I live because my city is known for sprawls so there are a lot of high rise buildings which has beautiful view.

✓ Yes, there are quite a few tall buildings close to the area where I live because my city is known for urban sprawl, so there are a lot of high-rise buildings which have beautiful views.

Problems: missing article before 'area' and incorrect noun form 'sprawls' and hyphenation and subject-verb agreement 'which has' and singular 'view'. Corrections: add the definite article 'the area' because a specific area is meant; use the uncountable phrase 'urban sprawl' rather than 'sprawls'; hyphenate 'high-rise' as a compound adjective; change 'has' to 'have' to agree with plural 'buildings'; change 'view' to plural 'views' to match context. Suggestion: read sentences to check articles before nouns and ensure subjects and verbs agree in number.

× Yes, I usually capture them on camera when I find historical buildings or architectural so I can look at them and I find them very interesting.

✓ Yes, I usually capture them on camera when I find historical or architecturally interesting buildings so I can look at them; I find them very interesting.

Problems: awkward word order and incorrect form 'architectural' used alone; missing punctuation causing run-on sentence. Corrections: place 'historical' and 'architecturally interesting' together to modify 'buildings'; remove redundant 'buildings' repetition and use punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: use appropriate adjective or adverbial forms (architecturally interesting) and break long sentences into clearer clauses.

× Yes, I would love to visit Eiffel Tower in Paris because it looks very fascinating and also I saw a lot of films umm in Eiffel Tower and it's a so romantic.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it looks very fascinating; I have also seen it in many films and it's so romantic.

Problems: missing definite article 'the' before 'Eiffel Tower'; awkward tense and phrasing 'I saw a lot of films umm in Eiffel Tower'; extra 'a' before 'so romantic'. Corrections: add 'the Eiffel Tower'; use present perfect 'I have seen it in many films' to indicate experience; remove filler 'umm' and the unnecessary article before 'so romantic'. Suggestion: remember landmarks usually take 'the' and use appropriate tense to express life experiences (present perfect). Use concise phrasing.

× Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because usually the skyscrapers and highlights buildings has a modern structure and they have better facilities like the gym or sauna and better security.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because usually skyscrapers and high-rise buildings have a modern structure and better facilities like a gym or sauna and improved security.

Problems: 'highlights buildings' is incorrect word choice; subject-verb disagreement 'has' with plural subject; article usage 'the' unnecessary before plurals; awkward listing. Corrections: change 'highlights buildings' to 'high-rise buildings'; remove 'the' before plurals; change 'has' to 'have' to agree with plural subject; use 'a gym' for singular facility and 'improved security' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure plural nouns pair with plural verbs and choose correct compound adjectives (high-rise).