Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng cần ngắn gọn hơn và sửa lỗi ngắt câu. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng 1-2 câu hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ tên tòa nhà, vị trí) và tránh câu rời (‘For example.’ nên gắn với thông tin liền sau).

Exemplo: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in Hanoi, one of the most developed cities in Vietnam. For instance, the Delta Tower and several modern high-rises nearby house offices and apartments, which you can often see along the main roads.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng có những lỗi lặp từ và một chút dài. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, dùng một liên từ để nối ý, và sửa lỗi lặp ‘when I when’. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về loại tòa nhà bạn thích chụp.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Photography is a hobby of mine, so I often photograph interesting or historic buildings. For example, I enjoy capturing the intricate facades of old French-colonial houses because reviewing these photos later helps me relax and sparks new creative ideas.

Sugestão: Nội dung rõ ràng nhưng có vài lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không chính xác (‘their architectures’, 'para para'). Nên dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn: câu chủ đề + lý do + mong muốn cụ thể. Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc và sửa lỗi từ vựng.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because its bamboo-inspired design is both beautiful and unique. I want to see the architecture up close and go to the observation deck to enjoy panoramic views of the city.

Sugestão: Ý tốt nhưng câu hơi dài, có lỗi thì-hiện tại và dùng từ. Nên trả lời trực tiếp, rồi nêu 2 lý do ngắn gọn với liên từ thích hợp. Sửa cấu trúc như 'I prefer living' và 'when I leave' hoặc 'when people leave'.

Exemplo: Not really. I prefer living in a low-rise building or a house because elevators in tall buildings can be slow and crowded during rush hour, and tall buildings often feel less like a close community, which makes me feel isolated.

× For example. Delta has several more modern high rises with offices and apartments.

✓ For example, Delta has several more modern high-rises with offices and apartments.

Incorrect sentence split and punctuation. 'For example.' should connect to the sentence that follows with a comma. Also use hyphen in 'high-rises' when used as a compound noun. Suggestion: combine the fragments and use correct punctuation and hyphenation.

× Looking at these photos later helps me relax and boost my creativity when I when I'm stressed.

✓ Looking at these photos later helps me relax and boost my creativity when I'm stressed.

Repeated words and extra 'when I' create an error. Use present simple 'helps' to describe a habitual effect; 'when I'm stressed' is correct. Suggestion: remove the duplicated phrase to make the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× Its design is inspired by bamboo, which I find very beautiful and unique.

✓ Its design is inspired by bamboo, which I find very beautiful and unique.

No correction needed for grammar here; sentence is correct. Included to confirm subject 'design' and verb 'is' agree. No change required.

× I'd like to see their architectures in person.

✓ I'd like to see their architecture in person.

'Architecture' is an uncountable noun in this context; 'architectures' is incorrect. Also 'their' is acceptable if referring to plural architects or owners, but likely 'its' referring to the building would be clearer. Suggestion: use 'architecture' and consider 'its architecture' if referring to Landmark 80.

× I also want to go to the top to enjoy para para panoramic views of the city.

✓ I also want to go to the top to enjoy the panoramic views of the city.

The repeated 'para para' is nonsensical and should be removed. Add definite article 'the' before 'panoramic views'. Suggestion: remove extraneous words and include 'the' for specific views.

× Uh, not really, because I believe that if I leave our tall building, I could often have to wait for a long time for the elevator, especially during rush hour where many people are queuing.

✓ Uh, not really, because I believe that if I lived in a tall building, I would often have to wait a long time for the elevator, especially during rush hour when many people are queuing.

Incorrect conditional and modal use. Use second conditional 'if I lived... I would' to express hypothetical situation. 'Could often have to wait' is awkward; 'would often have to wait' is clearer. Also use 'when' instead of 'where' for time clauses. Suggestion: use correct conditional form and simpler modal construction.

× I would feel a sense of isolation because it's harder to be a close community.

✓ I would feel a sense of isolation because it's harder to build a close community.

'Be a close community' is ungrammatical; you 'build' or 'form' a community, and 'community' is a noun representing a group. Suggestion: use verb 'build' and keep 'close community' as noun phrase.

× And so that is the reason why I prefer live in a low rise building or a house on the ground.

✓ And so that is the reason why I prefer to live in a low-rise building or a house on the ground.

Missing infinitive marker 'to' after 'prefer'. Also use hyphen in 'low-rise'. 'On the ground' is awkward; 'on the ground floor' or 'a house on the ground' could be clarified; here 'a house on the ground' is acceptable but 'on the ground floor' is more natural. Suggestion: add 'to' and hyphenate 'low-rise'.