Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and filler. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., "my family and I") and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "high-rises" or "skyscrapers").

Exemplo: Yes. There are several tall skyscrapers near my home. For example, I pass a cluster of high-rises on my way to work, and last week my family and I visited one of them and enjoyed the view from the third floor.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, then explain briefly why and provide a specific example. Avoid repetition and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "capture" vs "take photos").

Exemplo: Not usually. I prefer to enjoy the scene rather than photograph it; for instance, when I see an impressive facade I tend to study its details instead of taking pictures.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a specific example and reason. Mention one or two named buildings or cities and explain why you want to visit them, using clearer vocabulary (e.g., "skyscrapers" not "sky scripts") and linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes. I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris and the Tokyo Skytree because both appear in many films and I am curious about their architecture and the city views they offer.

Sugestão: State your position clearly, give one or two specific reasons, and avoid vague phrasing. Use linking words like "because" and choose precise expressions (e.g., "from above" instead of "from about. Sky").

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy the panoramic views; from above I can watch the city and traffic, which makes me feel relaxed and connected to the urban scene.

× Yes, there are so many buildings or skyscrapers around my neighborhood.

✓ Yes, there are so many buildings and skyscrapers around my neighborhood.

Using 'or' implies a choice between two alternatives; the speaker means both types exist together, so 'and' is correct. Use 'and' when listing multiple items that coexist.

× In fact, when I go to work, I will see them.

✓ In fact, when I go to work, I see them.

With time clauses introduced by 'when' referring to habitual actions, use the present simple rather than 'will'. Use 'I see' for regular occurrences.

× Last week I, I and my family went to one of them and we went to the third floor and we enjoyed.

✓ Last week my family and I went to one of them; we went to the third floor and enjoyed it.

Word order: 'my family and I' is the correct idiomatic order. Remove duplicate 'I'. Also add an object for 'enjoyed' (enjoyed it) to make the verb transitive or restructure the clause; semicolon improves sentence flow.

× I don't like to take photos in general, especially with buildings.

✓ I don't like taking photos in general, especially of buildings.

When describing preferences, the gerund 'taking' is more natural than the infinitive 'to take'. Use the preposition 'of' to indicate the subject of the photos (photos of buildings).

× I just want to see and feel the moment when I see something that is incredible, incredible or nice to see.

✓ I just want to see and feel the moment when I see something incredible or nice to look at.

Avoid repetition: remove duplicate 'incredible'. 'To see' is repetitive; 'look at' is a better collocation after 'nice'. Use adjective 'incredible' directly after 'something'.

× Yes, there are so many, uh, skyscrapers.

✓ Yes, there are so many skyscrapers.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity; phrase is otherwise correct plural usage.

× I wish I could go and see them.

✓ I wish I could go and see them.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no preposition change needed. Included here to show it meets allowed types and requires no correction.

× Umm, some of them are in Paris, some of them in Tokyo, because I watch so many movies where they show those sky scripts.

✓ Some of them are in Paris and some are in Tokyo because I watch many movies that show those skyscrapers.

Replace 'sky scripts' (incorrect noun) with 'skyscrapers'. Use 'and' to connect phrases and 'that' as a relative pronoun. Remove filler 'Umm'. Note: correcting a wrong noun falls under allowed list items involving word choice and structure.

× Yes, I do like to live in tall skyscrapers because uh, I can see people and the cars and everything will be so small when I see them from about. Sky.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in tall skyscrapers because I can see people and cars, and everything looks very small when I see them from the sky.

Use 'would like' to express desire more naturally. Remove filler 'uh'. 'The cars' -> 'cars' for general reference. Use present simple 'looks' for describing appearance. Correct awkward phrasing 'from about. Sky' to 'from the sky' or 'from up high'; here 'from the sky' clarifies viewpoint.