Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Watch articles and verb forms (e.g., "is made up" not "that made-up").

Exemplo: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small neighborhood made up mostly of houses and a few supermarkets, so the area feels quiet and residential.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and correct noun/verb forms. Begin with a direct statement, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" or "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings, especially when the architecture is unfamiliar to me, because it reveals a lot about local culture. For example, I once took photos of a colonial-era market and learned about the city's history.

Sugestão: Fix basic grammar and prepositions, and organize into two clear sentences: a direct answer and a vivid specific detail. Avoid repetition. Use correct collocations ("the Eiffel Tower in Paris", "see it by myself").

Exemplo: Yes, I'd love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris to see what the hype is about. I especially want to see it at night when the lights sparkle; I imagine the view feels magical and I hope to see it in person one day.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Give a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons (views, convenience, facilities). Use linking words and correct tense/phrasing (e.g., "it would offer" not "it's going to be").

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer spectacular views of the city. In addition, many high-rise apartments have good amenities like gyms and security, which I find attractive.

× There aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small neighborhood that that made-up mainly of houses and supermarkets my whole country actually cherishes.

✓ There aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small neighborhood that is mainly made up of houses and supermarkets which my whole country actually cherishes.

Errors: repeated word 'that that', incorrect passive participle order 'made-up' and missing verb 'is', and awkward clause 'my whole country actually cherishes' needs a relative pronoun. Suggestion: remove duplication, use correct passive construction 'is mainly made up of', and connect the clause with 'which' to describe what the country cherishes. Ensure subject and verb are present and clauses are linked clearly.

× Definitely I love taking pictures of building, specially if they're, uh, architecture was new to me because I think it, umm, it gives me a clear picture of other people's culture and how other countries build their buildings and it's an amazing.

✓ Definitely I love taking pictures of buildings, especially if their architecture is new to me, because I think it gives me a clear picture of other people's culture and how other countries design their buildings, and it's amazing.

Errors: 'building' should be plural 'buildings'; 'specially' is incorrect spelling and usage — use 'especially'; fragment 'they're, uh, architecture was new to me' mixes forms — use 'their architecture is new to me' (present tense and correct pronoun). Remove filler and duplicate 'it'. Replace 'build' with better verb 'design' for buildings. Also avoid ending with 'an amazing' by using 'amazing'. Suggestions: use plural nouns to match context, maintain consistent present tense, correct spelling, and remove unnecessary fillers.

× Yes, of course I would like to visit Eiffel Tower on Paris.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris.

Errors: Missing definite article 'the' before 'Eiffel Tower' and wrong preposition 'on' should be 'in' for cities. Suggestion: use 'the' with famous monuments and 'in' for location within a city.

× But I think it's really amazing, especially in the night time when the stars start to show up on the Eiffel Tower.

✓ But I think it's really amazing, especially at night when the lights on the Eiffel Tower start to show up.

Errors: 'in the night time' is unnatural; 'at night' is idiomatic. 'Stars start to show up on the Eiffel Tower' is illogical — stars don't appear on the tower; likely means 'lights on the Eiffel Tower'. Suggestion: use natural time adverbials ('at night') and accurate imagery ('lights on the tower').

× So I hope one day to go there and say it by my.

✓ So I hope one day to go there and see it myself.

Errors: 'say it by my' is ungrammatical and likely a misuse of idiom. Correct phrase is 'see it myself'. Suggestion: use reflexive pronoun 'myself' to indicate personal experience and the verb 'see' for visiting a sight.

× Yes, definitely. I want to live in a tall building, be it would be a good chance for me to live in a tall building because I think the scenery would be so amazing and incredible and I think it would give me a chance to see what's far beyond the country and it's going to be a luxurious thing to do.

✓ Yes, definitely. I want to live in a tall building; it would be a good opportunity for me because I think the scenery would be amazing and it would give me a chance to see far beyond the country, and it would be a luxurious experience.

Errors: 'be it would be' is incorrect; should be 'it would be' or 'because it would be'. Repetition 'live in a tall building' unnecessary. 'Chance' vs 'opportunity' — 'opportunity' fits better. 'What's far beyond the country' is awkward; use 'see far beyond the country'. 'Luxurious thing to do' is informal; use 'luxurious experience'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, fix subject-verb phrasing, choose appropriate nouns, and keep consistent tense and register.