Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện phát âm và tránh lặp từ; tổ chức câu rõ ràng hơn (câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể); dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: "fish" thay vì "meat" khi nói về sashimi) và giảm ngập ngừng.

Exemplo: My favourite food is salmon sashimi from Japan. I particularly enjoy it because the fish is exceptionally fresh and has a delicate texture. For example, the thin, raw slices melt in the mouth and taste subtly sweet, which makes it a refreshing dish.

Sugestão: Tránh lặp ý và cấu trúc rườm rà; mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn rồi nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể với ví dụ; dùng linking words để mạch lạc (e.g., "because", "so", "also").

Exemplo: When I was young, I loved fried rice because it was cheap and simple to prepare. I could cook it myself after school, and adding vegetables and soy sauce made it quite tasty and satisfying.

Sugestão: Giảm tiếng ấp úng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp về thì và số nhiều; cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và dùng từ phù hợp ("hot meals" not "a very warm"). Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể theo mùa.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer cold foods and desserts, such as ice cream and chilled salads, to stay cool. In winter I tend to choose hot meals like grilled meat or a hot bowl of soup and green tea to keep warm.

Sugestão: Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng: câu chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ; sửa ngữ pháp (thời, động từ: "changed" not "exchange"), tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng chính xác ("palate" dùng được nhưng kết hợp câu tốt hơn).

Exemplo: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As I grew older my palate developed, so I moved from simple dishes like fried rice to more refined foods such as sashimi, which I now prefer.

× My favorite food is sashimi from Japan and especially I like a salmon sashimi because it is very fresh and very delicate.

✓ My favorite food is sashimi from Japan, and especially I like salmon sashimi because it is very fresh and delicate.

Use no article before 'salmon sashimi' when referring to the dish in general; remove the extra 'a' and unnecessary repetition. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× I really like a a sashimi because it is a fresh and raw cut of meat O of fresh meat, so it is very juicy and very tender.

✓ I really like sashimi because it is a fresh, raw cut of fish, so it is very juicy and tender.

Remove duplicate 'a a' and do not use 'a' before an uncountable or general dish 'sashimi'. Use 'fish' not 'meat' for sashimi. Use commas between adjectives and avoid redundant words.

× When I was young, I used to like to eat a fried rice because it is a very cheap and easy to make dish.

✓ When I was young, I used to like to eat fried rice because it was a very cheap and easy-to-make dish.

Do not use 'a' before uncountable dish 'fried rice'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'When I was young' and hyphenate 'easy-to-make'.

× Also because of that I could make it by myself every day.

✓ Also, because of that I could make it myself every day.

Remove redundant 'by' in 'by myself' (both are acceptable but 'myself' suffices); sentence stays past ability 'could'. Add comma after 'Also'.

× So it is a very good dish also.

✓ So it was a very good dish as well.

Use past tense 'was' to be consistent with earlier past time frame and prefer 'as well' for formality.

× And the second reason it is it is very good and it is very flavorful.

✓ And the second reason is that it was very good and very flavorful.

Use past tense 'was' and correct word order 'the second reason is that'. Remove repeated 'it is'.

× Yes, I eat different fruits at different time of the year.

✓ Yes, I eat different fruits at different times of the year.

Use plural 'times' when speaking of multiple occasions throughout the year.

× Like when in summer I like to eat ice cream and cold meal.

✓ For example, in summer I like to eat ice cream and cold meals.

Replace 'Like when in summer' with 'For example, in summer' for naturalness; use plural 'meals' and avoid 'cold meal' singular.

× When it is a winter, I like to eat hot meals like uh, like tea, hot tea or like uh, uh, grilled meat, something like that because it is a very warm.

✓ In winter, I like to eat hot meals like hot tea or grilled meat, something like that because it is very warming.

Do not use 'a' before 'winter'. Use 'in winter' and 'very warming' or 'keeps me very warm'; remove filler words and duplicate 'hot tea'.

× Just I think my favorite food exchange since I was a child because I think for every year you grow up a little bit and you you change yourself, you change your palate and everything.

✓ I think my favorite food has changed since I was a child because every year you grow up a little and you change, including your palate.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to describe change from past to present. Remove redundant 'Just' and duplicated 'you'. Simplify 'change yourself' to 'you change'.

× So I changed my favorite food from fried rice to sashimi and from many else dish when I when I were older.

✓ So I changed my favorite food from fried rice to sashimi and many other dishes when I was older.

Use past tense 'was' (not 'were') with singular subject 'I'. Replace 'many else dish' with 'many other dishes' for correct quantifier and plural form.