Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct awkward phrases, avoid repetitions, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also fix vocabulary errors (e.g., 'rice cake dish' not 'less cake dishes') and grammar (tense and articles).

Exemplo: My favourite food is tteokbokki, a spicy and sweet Korean rice‑cake dish. I often ate it after school with friends because it was cheap and satisfying, and we enjoyed the spicy sauce together.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid fragments and unnecessary words.

Exemplo: When I was young, I liked fast food such as hamburgers and pizza because they were convenient and tasty. Also, there were many restaurants near my home, so my family often ordered them.

Sugestão: This answer is quite clear; improve by tightening sentences and using smoother linking phrases. Correct small repetition and article usage, and add one specific example or brief reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I prefer cold dishes like naengmyeon because they are refreshing, whereas in winter I choose hot soups to keep my body warm.

Sugestão: Make a clear contrast between past and present. Use concise sentences, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'cookies' not 'cooking'), and finish thoughts fully. Provide one specific example of a healthier choice and a brief reason.

Exemplo: Yes, it has changed. When I was a child I often ate fast food and sweets, especially cookies and cake. Now I prefer healthier options like grilled fish and salads because I want to stay fit and have more energy.

× My favorite food is tteokbokki, a spicy and sweet Korean * less cake dishes, so I often ate it after school when I was a student with my friends because it's a cheap and falling so we can literally enjoy.

✓ My favorite food is tteokbokki, a spicy and sweet Korean rice cake dish, so I often ate it after school with my friends because it's cheap and filling, and we could really enjoy it.

The sentence contains adjective/adverb and word choice errors: 'less cake dishes' is incorrect for describing tteokbokki; the correct phrase is 'rice cake dish'. 'Falling' is a wrong word; the intended word is 'filling'. Also tense and sentence clarity were improved: 'so I often ate it after school with my friends' fits past context, and 'we could really enjoy it' is natural. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases for food (e.g. 'rice cake dish') and choose appropriate adjectives ('filling' not 'falling').

× When I was young I liked a past food such as hamburger pizza because they were very convenient eating and so delicious and I there are many restaurants near my home so.

✓ When I was young I liked fast foods such as hamburgers and pizza because they were convenient to eat and very delicious, and there were many restaurants near my home.

This sentence has tense and count issues: 'liked a past food' is incorrect—use 'liked fast foods' or 'liked foods'. 'Hamburger pizza' should be two items 'hamburgers and pizza'. 'Convenient eating' should be 'convenient to eat'. The phrase 'I there are many restaurants' mixes tenses and subjects; change to 'there were many restaurants'. Suggestion: list items clearly, use plural where appropriate, and keep past tense consistent ('was'/'were').

× Yes I I eat different food depending on the season. In summer I usually prefer eating cold dishes like naengmyeon, but while in winter I prefer eating the hot food to keep my body warm.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In summer I usually prefer cold dishes like naengmyeon, but in winter I prefer hot foods to keep my body warm.

Problems: repeated 'I', singular/plural mismatch and unnecessary gerunds. Use 'foods' (plural) when speaking generally. 'Prefer eating cold dishes' is acceptable but 'prefer cold dishes' is more natural. 'While in winter' is redundant—use 'in winter'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, match plural forms for general statements, and simplify verb phrases ('prefer' + noun).

× Yes, actually when I was young I enjoyed I usually enjoyed eating the fast food and sweet food, especially dessert like cooking or cake.

✓ When I was young I usually enjoyed eating fast food and sweets, especially desserts like cookies or cake.

Issues: tense repetition 'enjoyed I usually enjoyed' is redundant. 'the fast food and sweet food' should be 'fast food and sweets' (general categories). 'Dessert like cooking' is incorrect; likely 'cookies' was intended. Suggestion: remove redundant verbs, use plural nouns for general categories, and correct item names ('cookies').

× But now I prefer to eat the healthier food to keep my.

✓ But now I prefer to eat healthier food to keep my body healthy.

This sentence is incomplete and has article issues: 'the healthier food' is awkward—use 'healthier food' or 'healthier foods'. The sentence ends abruptly 'to keep my.' Complete the idea with 'body healthy' or similar. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary definite article and ensure complete clauses by specifying the object ('body').