Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (taste, ingredients, memory). Use linking words like “because” or “and” correctly. Aim for 2–3 sentences and a wider range of descriptive vocabulary (e.g., numbing-spicy, aromatic, savory).

Exemplo: My favourite food is Mala Tang, a numbing-spicy Chinese stew with vegetables and thinly sliced meat. I love it because of its rich, aromatic broth and the way it reminds me of family dinners back home.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and grammar (past simple for past habits) and avoid fillers. Give one clear topic sentence about childhood preference, then a brief reason for change with linking words like “but” and “so.” Use more precise vocabulary (desserts, healthier options, snacks) and correct comparatives (healthier).

Exemplo: When I was young, I often chose sweet desserts like cakes and candies, but I later realised they were unhealthy. So now I prefer healthier snacks such as salads and unsalted peanuts.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and incorrect words (melatonin is wrong). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give seasonal examples using linking words (“in winter… whereas in summer…”). Use specific, relevant vocabulary (hot pot, warm soups, refreshing salads). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. In winter I usually eat warming dishes like hot pot and hearty soups to stay warm, whereas in summer I prefer refreshing foods such as salads and cold desserts like ice cream.

Sugestão: Be direct and correct grammar: use present perfect or past simple appropriately and correct comparatives (healthier than when I was a child). Provide one clear reason for the change and a specific example of a preferred food now. Avoid repeating phrases like “I think.”

Exemplo: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. I now prefer healthier options, such as grilled fish and mixed salads, rather than the sweet treats I used to eat.

× My favorite food is Mala Tang, a spicy Chinese Stew with uh, vegetables and meat cooked inside.

✓ My favorite food is Mala Tang, a spicy Chinese stew with vegetables and meat cooked inside.

Use lowercase for common nouns: 'stew' is not a proper noun. This is an article/capitalization style error; change 'Stew' to 'stew'. Also remove filler 'uh' for fluency.

× And I love it because uh, it is one of my most favorite uh, comfort food and every time I eat it I think of my family a lot.

✓ And I love it because it is one of my favorite comfort foods, and every time I eat it I think of my family.

'Most favorite' is redundant; use 'favorite'. 'Comfort food' should be plural when referring generally to types: 'comfort foods'. Remove filler 'uh' and trim 'a lot' for clarity and conciseness.

× I usually choose sweet dessert when I was young, but I found out that uh, these food are not good to our health, so I'm I often choose something more healthier to eat such as salad or peanut.

✓ I usually chose sweet desserts when I was young, but I found out that these foods were not good for our health, so I often chose healthier options to eat, such as salad or peanuts.

Multiple errors: tense consistency—use past tense 'chose' to match 'when I was young' (Grammar Problem Type 5). Plural forms: 'sweet dessert' -> 'sweet desserts' and 'these food' -> 'these foods' (singular/plural issue). Use 'were not good for our health' (correct preposition). 'More healthier' is incorrect: use 'healthier' (no 'more'). 'Peanut' should be plural 'peanuts'. Removed filler and fixed sentence structure.

× I usually choose sweet dessert when I was young, but I found out that uh, these food are not good to our health, so I'm I often choose something more healthier to eat such as salad or peanut.

✓ I usually chose sweet desserts when I was young, but I found out that these foods were not good for our health, so I often chose healthier options to eat, such as salad or peanuts.

Also address subject-verb agreement and word form: 'I usually chose' better conveys habitual past action. 'Healthier options' is a clearer adjective+noun phrase.

× Yeah, definitely. I prefer eating hot hot pot or melatonin such as these hot foods, warm foods in the winter.

✓ Yeah, definitely. I prefer eating hot hot pot or melange, such as these hot, warm foods in the winter.

Original contains incorrect word 'melatonin' (a hormone) likely meant 'melange' or 'mala'—replace with an appropriate word. Also remove duplication 'hot hot' and add commas. Use correct noun choice; this is article/word choice error.

× However, at the summer I prefer to eat something more fresh such as salad or something cold like ice cream.

✓ However, in the summer I prefer to eat something fresher, such as salad or something cold like ice cream.

Use preposition 'in' with seasons ('in the summer'), and use comparative form 'fresher' not 'more fresh'.

× In my opinion, I think that my appetite has changed a lot from children time to now.

✓ In my opinion, I think that my appetite has changed a lot from childhood until now.

Use correct noun 'childhood' instead of 'children time' (word choice). 'From ... to now' improved to 'from childhood until now' for natural expression.

× I think I prefer more healthier food now compared with the child.

✓ I think I prefer healthier food now compared with when I was a child.

'More healthier' is redundant; use 'healthier'. 'Compared with the child' is incorrect reference; use 'compared with when I was a child' to indicate the comparison object/time.